You’ve Fallen For A Bad Guy
By: wonjana

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/83164

Title: (2.5/5)

The title fits your story but it isn’t creative and it’s quite common.

Appearance: (2/5)

I didn’t like it. I meant the poster could’ve been better done. The pictures could’ve be more HQ rather than SQ (standard quality). It’s better than nothing.  

Description/Foreword: (10/15)

Short and simple. It made me want to read more. I especially love how you have a character chart.

Plot/Originality: (8.5/10)

I wouldn’t say this is the most original plot but it’s great. Having another perspective can help give you more ideas that can make the plot more original.

Characters: (4/5)

They are well described. I could totally imagine how they are like in my mind.

Flow: (6/10)

It’s okay but there are times where the pace is too fast. You should add a bit more details to make it more descriptive.

Grammar and Spelling: (12/20)

As there are many other fanfics out there, never end a sentence with three dots. I can’t really explain this part but one example is below:

Ex. 1: "I'm sleepy. I want to sleep." L. Joe said in a sleepy tone and then yawned. "I'll kill you later okay?" Correction(s): "I'm sleepy. I want to sleep," L. Joe said in a sleepy tone and then yawned. "I'll kill you later okay?"

Commas should be added when it’s necessary.

Ex. 2:  She shouldn't help the killer of her best friend but somehow her feet just couldn't stop.

Correction(s): She shouldn't help the killer of her best friend but somehow, her feet just couldn't stop.

Other than that, there weren’t many grammatical errors. It was basically a repetitive of what it was written above.  

Overall Enjoyment: (18/20)

I got to say, I am not a type of girl who reads angst fanfics. I got to say it was an amazing fanfic.  

Total: (63/90) 70%

Comments: Love the way you wrote it. It has bits of different genres. I think it really attracts the reader. Keep up the good work!