calling for SheeLa_ELF
♫ м ι l ĸ y ω α ν є || яєνιєω яєqυєѕт ѕнσρ ♫ || closed ||
Title: (1/5)
It reveals too much of the inside story.
Appearance: (5/5)
Amazingly done. Everything seems to blend in well.
Description/Foreword: (15/15)
In my opinion, i got curious and wanted to read on.
Plot/Originality: (10/10)
Well Done.
Characters: (2.5/5)
There could be more details on the characters.
Flow: (4/10)
To me, it was too fast. I can't absorb everything in.
Grammar and Spelling: (15/20)
You used too much dot(s). Instead of "rise", it's raised. You also need to watch out for your punctuation.
Overall Enjoyment: (10/20)
I think it was alright, could be a bit longer.
Total: (62.5/90) 69%
Comments: I think you need to watch out for your punctuation and slow down a bit. Also, be more descriptive and add more details towards their actions. Sorry for the late review D: Other than that, don't feel discouraged and keep on writing (:
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