Excuses
by: -Amber
Story Link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/104309/excuses-fluff-keyxonew-oneshot-romance-keynew-onkey

Title: (5/5)

It matches well with your one shot. There is a hint of questioning that can attract the readers into reading it even though it generalized what the story is about.

Appearance: (4.5/5)

I like your poster though it could be better done. For the quote, maybe you should add an “s” to “you have no excuse not to love”

Description/Foreword: (15/15)

Since this was a one-shot, usually I don’t really care but, “woah!” is the only word that came out of my mouth. It doesn’t spoil too much of the plot but it tells you what it is about. It made me want to read more.

Plot/Originality: (9.5/10)

I wouldn’t say it is the most original but I like your twist. It made me want to read more.  

Characters: (5/5)

The characters are well-described and introduced. It was also realistic. I can imagine how each and character is like in my head.

Flow: (9.5/10)

I got to say it was well done. I can absorb and imagine what is happening. It was put into much detail.

Grammar and Spelling: (18/20)

I didn’t really find any major grammars in this fanfic. Never use “...” to end a sentence. If you plan to use “...,” use three dots not two. There was a few spelling errors.

Ex. 1:

“Sumthin ish blochking mwy nowsee~~”

Correction(s): “Something is blocking my nose~~”

Other than that, wow! I don’t know if English is your first language or not, but if it’s not, I am amazed.

Overall Enjoyment: (20/20)

I really enjoyed this. I am not an OnKey shipper but I was absorbed into this.

Total: (86.5/90) 96%

Comments: Keep up the good work! (: