REVIEW PICKUP: fefedove

Title: 4/5 I think 'Our History' is quite a nice name, and it has revelance to the story. It's not overused. However, if I were to scroll down on a list of stories, I wouldn't click on yours based on the title, because it didn't really attract me.

Description: 5/5 Well, your description pretty much sums up your whole story, but without telling the plot, which is a good thing because your story is really short and revealing the plot wouldn't have made it as interesting.

Vocabulary: -/10

Grammar: 10/10 From the emails the other members of EXO has been sending, I didn't see any grammar mistakes so I'll give you full marks on this.

Plot: 7/10 I think... having a character have a miscarriage is a pretty common plot. I've seen many stories out there like that, but I liked the idea of you putting it all into a web browser's history. I've never read anything like this before, only chats, and even though the history was kind of complicated for me, it was really unique, and original.

Flow: 9/10 I don't really know how to grade you on your flow since it's like a web browser history... But since it looks good enough to me, a 9.

Effect on reader: 5/10 O_O Idk I was pretty confused when I read it because which were supposed to be the chats and which were the history... I'm a really slow person erhhem excuse me. A miscarriage is a very sad thing, but since you didn't actually put it out in words, but only in the searches history, it didn't affect me. I didn't feel emotional while reading it, and even though the layout was well done, I don't think I was that attracted to your story. 

Overall: 55/100 I'm sorry if the review was so horrendously short >< 

REVIEWER: kaepie

REVIEWED FINISHED ON: 07/16/2014

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