IAmAnExoFan

REVIEW PICKUP: IAmAnExoFan

Title: 4/5

Description: 4/5

Vocabulary: 6/10

Grammar: 9/10

Plot: 6/10

Effect on reader: 6/10

Flow: 8/10 In my opinion, the flow of the story is great. Every part is explained enough, not too much and not too less. It doesn't look rushed, because some other stories I've read looks rushed, but yours looks okay so the flow is fine.

Characters: I think the characters were not as developed. I can see Kai's character quite well; but for Kyungsoo, not as much. You should elaborate more on their thoughts and feelings to make the impact of whatever feeling is meant to be conveyed, stronger.

Overall: 7/10 It is a nice story with a nice plot but more elaboration on feelings would've been nice and more vocab used would be good. It's a story worth reading!

REVIEWER: kaepie
FINSHED ON: 06/13/2014
Reviews are not meant to insult so please don't take our reviews too harshly! This is only from one's point of view.

You can read her story here!

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b2utifulstarlite #1 Dec 4, 2014 11:47:29

Chapter 30: affiliates? :)
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/797208/

-caas- #2 Aug 17, 2014 15:06:25

Hi. I'm starting a shops list and I want to add your shop/gallery/list/contest/roleplay :
Can you pls complete this form and put it in the comments box for this link?

Author's name:
Author's link:
Co-authors:
Created:
Status:
Banner's link:
Shop's Title:
Shop's link:
Shop genre:
Description:
Author's Note:
Info you want to add:
Services/Packs/posters/trailers exp:

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/802501/dream-city-shops-list-graphic-poster-trailer-advertise-shop-layouts-reviewer

b2utifulstarlite #3 Aug 11, 2014 17:57:33

Chapter 30: Thank you so much for the wonderful review! I will work on the suggestions for the title and the description to improve them. :) In the future can I review for this story again?

Isellina #4 Aug 8, 2014 14:35:39

Looking forward to my review :) thank you in advance

darkpleasure #5 Aug 8, 2014 10:13:46

Chapter 30: Thank you for the review! I decided not to skip the reply and write one quickly (I need to go to work agh!)
Description- You had me wheezing due to lack of oxygen. I laughed so much! XD Yes, Chapter 6 was meant to be disgusting after some point and I'm glad (well, not exactly that word) that it turned out like I wanted. I always try to do my best in forming images easy enough for the reader to fantasize so this is the best compliment one can give me. Thank you! (and no, I am not such a director. I'll think about it now that you mentioned it, though xD)
Plot- 'My Love from the Stars' did give me an idea. But the powers and such were a loose combination of the 'EXO powers' and whatnot. I admit that it give me a boost in my inspiration, though. And the fainting when kissed might have been from MLFTS, I'm not really sure where I got that idea from... ^^;
Flow- I seriously don't deserve so many compliments! >ω<
I'm truly thankful for the time you took to review my story! Really! And I'm glad you liked it as well! I will surely come back when I finish my new story, if you would not mind. Also, could I credit you as a reviewer next to the shop credits? I like to credit the people who do the work as much as the shops they work for. ^^ (sorry for writing so much!)

searchingmyself #6 Aug 6, 2014 08:48:34

again, applied for a review . thanks for your hard work:)

searchingmyself #7 Aug 6, 2014 08:47:43

Requested for a review.
thank you^^