REVIEW PICKUP: wuyifan95

Title: 3/5

Unique but  it only directs to one person in the story, making it an awkwardly placed title. Plus there is not much of a mention of the song except that one tone.

Description: 3/5

First things first, NEVER CHANGE FONTS IN THE SAME PAGE. It's irritating and straining. Add a page break or something if you absolutely want to keep the font.

Then, don't do character profiles. It's the authors' job to explain the character within the story instead of presenting it openly and not presenting it subtlety in the content. 

Also don't add many pictures, they might not load sometimes; so that kind of leaves the reader in the dark. TBH Lunia scares me a bit.

Vocabulary: 4/5

Simple and well conveyed.

Grammar: 6/10

I know English isn't your first language, but I can say you did pretty well for someone who doesn't have English as their first language though. I'm not going to point them out because text selection when disabled is hard you probably already know them.

Plot: 7/10

It was like another TeacherxStudent; except with a twist.  The character description could use some work though.

I would have liked a bit pf a back story on Mr 

Effect on reader. 7/10

There's enough suspense and it is a bit of a new kind of TeacherxStudent fic. So kudos on that.

Flow: 8/10

It was smooth and I didnt read anything that didn't belong.

Overall: 70/100

It was really good and juding by the readers you have, they really do pay attention to your story. I would advise you work on your grammar or get a beta. 

REVIEWER: TheSparliestVampire
FINISHED ON: 12th July 2014
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