I, Kim Hana, Flew Back In Time To Kidnap A Very y Man Named Kim Jongin by exotic_babies

I, Kim Hana, Flew Back In Time To Kidnap A Very y Man Named Kim Jongin

Genre: Fantasy

Main Character(s): Kai/OC (Kim Hana)

Contains: Straight

Chapter(s): One (On-Going)

Summary: Going back in time to snatch your love is one thing. But going back in time to snatch a y Kai is another thing.

Title ★★★★★

O.O!!! WOUH WOUH WOUH! Too long for my liking! >.< And you are literally telling EVERYTHING that will happen and what the story is about, leave us something to ponder about! Since is very long, I can bet my that this is the ONLY fic with this title without even looking into AFF search XD lol!

Plot ★★★★★

This is indeed a very interesting story. I already love the main character Kim Hana, she is loud, y and all over the place! Lol! If our future children be like this...then I must say, it's not far from the truth. I believe they will somehow be like this! ;P

Grammar ★★★★★

I caught on a few typos that you can easily edit:

"Mom, whom should I do?!"

pererted - ert

3 seconds - three seconds

aggrivated - aggravated

defidently - definitely

50 years ago- fifty years ago

herpies - herpes

10 - ten

watermellon - watermelon

steriods - steroids

I think I already told you this in your other story review but never use the number, use the word version. Though it can be used at times but you have to make sure when.

Originality ★★★★★

Wouh, wouh wouh wouh! O.O This VERY original! I've never read something like this...it really made me wonder when I have my own children or grandkids and they need to make a report on such things...wow...I really don't want to imagine EXO dead :'( but this really made me think about it and it is really a nice plot! Interesting! Good job! :D You won me over with it!

Flow ★★★★★

Even though you only have one chapter, you've won me over! So far, so good! The flow is a-okay! ;)

Reader's POV

O.O!!! Omo! This is really good! Nice job! I have never read something like this! This is truly amazing! Though I kinda hate the fact that the title is so freaking long! o.o daym! BUT I guess it works for the story since I can see that you're going for a comedy/crack story. So it's all good! ^^

I give your story:

★★★★★

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-Tigress- #1 Jun 30, 2014 11:15:33

Chapter 24: Thanks so much! And no worries about thelong wait, I do know how life can catch us sometimes >.< I appreciate the work you did!! And definitely the advice. I have been trying to think of an original title >.< And yes typos plague me. >.< So thank you!!! <3

-Tigress- #2 Nov 23, 2013 20:27:37

Hi guys! I was just curious if you guys were on hiatus at the moment?

itsjustnana #3 Nov 23, 2013 08:40:43

Requested c:

Tychee #4 Nov 3, 2013 21:15:17

Requested ^__^
I'd like to say thanks before hand XDD

Tychee #5 Nov 3, 2013 12:05:35

Requested ^___^

Misskittyrose #6 Oct 28, 2013 15:17:51

Umm why did my story get rejected?

-Tigress- #7 Oct 27, 2013 22:25:41

Okay, I have requested for the second one =) Thank you!!!

-Tigress- #8 Oct 27, 2013 20:30:58

I have requested a review! I also have a Question; can I ask for another story to be reviewed at the same time?
Also, if the reviewer I chose can't/doesn't want to do it, I honestly don't mind who reviews it. I just would like a critical review please. =)

hazel_marie13 #9 Oct 27, 2013 00:02:57

Chapter 21: Thanks for the review :) I really do agree with all the mistakes/errors that I made & if I had time, I'll edit/correct it :)