Origami Butterfly

by: deluforselu

Genre: Angst/Romance

Main Character(s): Baekhyun/Chanyeol (BaekYeol)

Contains: /Character's Death

Chapter(s): One (Completed)

Summary:   Chanyeol still remembers crystal clear all the string of events that unfolded before the death of his one and only ray of light, Baekhyun.

Title ★★★★★

I love origamis! ^^ (Nice way of starting this review, huh? lol) The title it's indeed eye-catching, especialy if the reader; like me, loves origamis. Also the fact that it's a "butterfly" origami makes me read more cause I'm a bit obsess with butterflies >.< lol! I looked at the search box in aff and this is the only story with this title, however, there are two other stories that used the word "origami"; one called "Torn Origami" and the other one plain "Origami". I read that you are planning on keeping the "origami" theme in your stories. That's a big plus for readers to know that those stories are yours :) Nice touch! 

Plot ★★★★★

I really loved the plot (and hated it XD lol) however it's not so original cause we have heard about suicide and sickness and them dying. Still, it was a beautiful story and the way you made Chanyeol reminisce every day he spent with Baekhyun was indeed lovely. Good job! 

Grammar ★★★★★

I didn't saw any grammar issues nor typos. It was perfect!  I loved that you put a line between memories to separate them and that's a huge plus for the readers.

Originality ★★★★★

Most angst stories are based on people dying either by suicide or illness. So in that part, it lacks originality. There are other ways to kill a person XD: car accidents, plane crashes, terrorist attacks XD lol! I dunno! Or one can use fantasy things like my friend/fellow reviewer Najaeri did in her angst Suho story that's reviewed in this shop called "Ocean" (if you're curious about how she did it, you should check it out ;P).