Loveliest Confusion

by: misaki-sensei

Genre: Romance/Comedy

Main Character(s): Chanyeol/Baekhyun (Baekyeol) 

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Chapter(s): Eleven (On-Going)

Summary:    Byun Baekhyun is really fat but after hearing hurtful words from his classmate he locks in his room and later transforms into something really beautiful.

Title ★★★★★ 

I really liked the title! It's cute and lovely! ^^ And it's catchy! Or maybe it's just my Baekyeol feelz talking for themselves! XD lol! It is original since no one else in aff has it and it kinda tells a bit of what the story will be about but at the same time it doesn't. It's perfect!!! :D

Plot ★★★★★

This must be one out of the bestest Baekyeol plots I've ever read! :D This was so good! Kai as antagonist, Chanyeol as the prince and our main character cute fattie Baek! The end was a jackpot!!! It hit right in the spot! Nailed it down! I dunno what else to say! Baekhyun's character was lovely. Chanyeol was so cute and friendly and I just wanna love him and fall in love with him. Kai was that secondary character you feel pity for when he falls for the main character but his feelings aren't returned. It was perfect! Perfect! Perfect! X'D lol! BUUUT, I do need to tell you something...as advice, I would change for Baekhyun to be locked in his room for a month instead of two weeks like since his parents were out, he stayed inside his room and then he mom finds out about it and they see the new Baekhyun who hasn't eaten much and since, it is more accurate as one could really lose at least 30 pounds within a month (maybe even more). Also, I would change how much he weights since 100 lbs isn't really being fat. Korean standard, that's an average weight (on my standard, that's super skinny! ><). I think you should make him weight like 160 lbs at least, losing 30/40 pounds, he'd be 120/116 lbs which is close to Baekhyun's actual/real weight. Other than that, LOVED IT! ♥ 

Grammar ★★★★½

Aside from a few typos here and there, your grammar was excellent! And english isn't your first language, you say? Wow! Simply impressive! :) Seriously! -thumbs up- Good job! Good job!

  Originality ★★★★★

I haven't read a story that involved Baekhyun as a fatso turned into a beauty. This was awesome! Seriously! Very original! I loved Baekhyun! I loved Kai! I loved Chanyeol! Heck, I even loved Luhan, Baekhyun's parents and Kyungsoo at the end was spot on!