Chapter 20: I thought this was a suchen fic. You have written too many chapters and I do not see suchen anywhere. The part of the xiuchen are doing great but, why so many irrelevant characters appear in your story? You keep adding groups and more groups and people who have nothing to do with the plot and only lengthen it unnecessarily. I hope you can improve that and I really think that the stories are best when they focus on one thing and they develop since that point. You started the fanfic with suchen, in the third chapter you changed the story to life as a writer and singer of Chen and his adventures in his agency and the members of SNSD and SJ and GOT7 ..... and more and more people unnecessarily. In the middle, you have introduced the history of xiuchen and anger of Chen by what happened at the club in a very sporadic and a very rough finish. However, this fic, which began as a xiuchen / suchen, of xiuchen being boyfriends and suchen being secretly brothers. Now is not anything like that. What happened to the box of Suho? What happened with the relationship of Suho and Chen? those are the main issues of history and you are avoiding to answer. Just sorry I started reading this fic lively and finished angry because I felt wasting my time. I'm really sorry, perhaps this fic is not for me. And I'm sorry again if I am very critical, I also write fic and I understand the work that is going on, but that is why I like being told what people think of it. Finally, it also sorry for my English is not my native language and I try to improve it but I still have a long way. Thank you for your fic and I hope that can continue.

awwww taoris <3 ;;;;;

Wonderful~

Chapter 11: Ahh fck you chen im so mad at him what a jerk ugh xD

Chapter 2: wow..what secret that suho had? cant wait for another story...