Reminiscence - kjdzyx
BLK's Review Shop ACHIEVE--BLK's--
--Reviews-
--Reviews-
reminder
///////////////
Bonus: [Your questions and focuses for us here]
the atmosphere of the scenes, the flow of the story, character's emotions, sentence structure, and grammar
♦Feel free to message us personally with any concerns.
♦ thank you for choosing blk
reviews and for your patience! hope to see you visit again.
kjdzyx
request on: 6/16/17
REVIEWER: deedee_zelo90
finished on: 5/7/17
score:100/100
Title: (10/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - The title of the story is 'REminiscence' and it tells us the past event of our character of the story. I am actually very impressed for the choice of the title.
EYE-CATCHING (3/3) - The moment I opened your story, i found it extremly eye catching and it caught my attention.
original (4/4) - not many people on aff chooses to write about past events nor choses to use this title, which is good. Stories with overused titles are not original.
story's foreword/description (10/10)
story's summary (5/5) - Short but very precize summary have me very hooked and it made me want to read more. If you have used a long summary, i wouldn't read it because it simply uncovers story's plot and it's not good. so you did great job here.
appearance (5/5) - I like how did you organized everything, the font you used is not hurting for the eyes. The poster looks absolutely stunning. I love everything you did in this section.
characters/casts (10/10)
character development (5/5) - You grasped very well emotions of our main character Kyungsoo who have lost his lover Jongin. Losing someone you love is very hard and i am pretty sure that you never can recover from it. from the begining until end you developed Kyungsoo's character perfectly. However, I wished if you could have added more of Kai, but either way its perfectly fine like this as well.
character's relations (5/5) - In flashbacks of Kyungsoo we could see that they have met in highschool and that love have slowly blossomed into something else. For me, i had a feeling like i was watching a drama, i believed in every word you wrote.
the author's mindset (40/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - The story makes sense to me, it is totally understanible why Kyungsoo is hurting and why jongin did what he did to save other.
ORIGINALITY (10/10) - The storyline is not cliche like I already said, however there are some stories with similar storylines but they are not so amazingly written as yours. And what is important is that you gave us something fresh to read.
TONE (5/5) - The tone in story isn't hard to understand, furthermore, you used it very well so that readers can understand about what you are writing.
NARRATION (5/5) - You use Third Person POV, which is one of my favorites. In this POV the person is able to describe pretty much everything, and i liked how you used it here.
STORYLINE (10/10) - The storyline in general had me hooked, because its amazingly written, first of all. Second, you took your time to even show an events of how Kyungsoo and Kai met, how their love blossomed and the event of accident. During the Storyline we see how much its hard for Kyungsoo to move on from his lover's death, and to live in same apartment and to sleep at night in same bed he once shared with him. things like these in real life are hard to handle and to survive, losing someone you love is very hard and i don't think that is not something that can be easily to forget.
proper use of the english language (25/25)
proper grammar/punctuation (10/10) - While reading your story, i haven't gathered any major grammar mistakes that could have slowed down its pace.
termonology (5/5) - Your vocabulary is very good, you didn't use same words all over again, the sentence structure is very good as well.
language barrier (10/10) - There weren't any overused korean phrases or words that would made my reading slowed down. So there's nothing I could point out here.
Reviewer's enjoyment (5/5)
First of all, I am very sorry that you have to wait for too long for your review, I do hope that you however are satisfied with what I have said. I also enjoyed your story, I am wishing you happiness in your writing! :D
Comments