Nothing Lust Forever - Alecchi
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(10/10) Title: The title of your story is really good. It is special and interesting, you don't really know what to expect of the story because of the different ways of getting lust. Also the title is unique because when I looked it up the only story titles that popped were "Nothing Lasts Forever". And I love the way you play with "Nothing Lasts Forever" and "Nothing Lust Forever" that is really clever and it fits the story really well.
(8/10) Character: Hyeri is an interesting girl, she seems to be a normal girl that is studying and works a bit so she can earn a bit money. She seems to be innocent on the outside but she can be a wicked person if she wants to be so even Yura can't really control her. That brings me to another point of Hyeri because for the start of the story I had the feeling that Hyeri is really submissive, she lets Yura dominate her from the beginning without really knowing her. But then some chapter later she shows that she is brave enough to stand up when Yura does something she doesn't like.
Yura was a really mysterious person for me from the start because she has her secrets that she keeps and doesn't tell Hyeri and I thought that she wouldn't be a nice person towards her employees but you wrote that she is not like that which makes her character for me even more complex and interesting. Yura shows from the starts that she is the dominant person in their "relationship".
(10/10) Originality: For me the story is unique because I didn't read these kind of plots before and I like that you write the story as a report of the things that happened to Hyeri because it makes the story even more interesting.
(38/40) Storyline/Plot: The start of the story is really interesting because we get a short introduction into Hyeris life. Then there is already her first meeting with Yura which is pretty intense because Yura wants her opinion of her latest picture and here their story starts. I like the way Yura already shows her strong personality that Hyeri submits to her. Then they don't start with the hard BDMS stuff but with simple things that show that Yura is human and that she is serious about her work. Just by the start of their "relationship" Yura gives of the vibe that it is somehow work for her what they have and you do that pretty good. She sketches Hyeri but I have to say that after some chapters I had the feeling that you lost it a bit because you didn't write that much about how Yura draws her but punishes Hyeri or pleasures her.
As I already mentioned above I like that Hyeri is not completely submissive towards Yura and that you hint every now and then that it is for Hyeri not completely work but that she has some sort of feelings for Yura for example that she doesn't like that Yura doesn't kisses her on the lips.
What I liked the most about the plot was the fact that there is a lot of in it and everything but unlike other stories you still have a plot in your story that does really well with the amount of in it.
(25/25) Grammar/Errors: I didn't say major grammatical errors or misspelled words that catch your eye. But I have to admit that I didn't focus on the errors while reading the whole time but the times I didn't again I didn't find mistakes.
(5/5) Overall Enjoyment: I had fun reading your story because it is interesting and well written. You describe really good and there were no parts in the story that confused me or I couldn't understand.
(96/100) Points Total
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Review for: BlackRosesTears
Requested on: 6/4/2015
Finished On: 14/7/2015
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