Don't Choose The Latter - kukunoona
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KUKUNOONA
REQUEST ON: 12/6/15
REVIEWER: BLACKROSESTEARS
FINISHED ON: 1/5/15
SCORE: 92/100
TITLE: (9/10)
LOGICAL (3/3) - HONESTLY AT FIRST IT CAN BE HARD TO SEE A CONNECTION BETWEEN YOUR TITLE AND THE STORY BUT WHEN YOU FINISHED READING IT AND THINK ABOUT IT YOU CAN ACTUALLY SEE THAT THERE IS ONE.
EYE-CATCHING (2/3) - THOUGH IT IS AN INTERESTING TITLE IT DIDN'T REALLY CAUGHT MY ATTENTION AND MADE ME HYPED TO READ THE STORY. I JUST WASN'T FEELING IT.
ORIGINAL (4/4) - IT STILL IS A VERY ORIGINAL TITLE BECAUSE I CHECKED AND THERE ARE NO OTHER STORIES WITH THE SAME OR A SIMILAR TITLE.
STORY'S FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION (10/10)
STORY'S SUMMARY (5/5) - I ALWAYS LIKE IT WHEN THE FOREWORD WITH THE DESCRIPTION OF THE STORY DOESN'T REVEAL TOO MUCH AND IS GOOD WRITTEN SO YOU CAN POSSIBLY ALREADY GUESS THAT I LIKED IT HERE TOO.
YOUR FOREWORD DOESN'T REVEAL MUCH OF THE PLOT AND INSTEAD LEAVES PLENTY OF ROOM FOR GUESSES ABOUT THE STORY AND ITS PLOT. THEN I SAW THE TAGS YOU USED AND THERE WAS ANGST WHICH MADE ME INTERESTED IN THE STORY BECAUSE THE DESCRIPTION ACTUALLY SOUNDS MORE LIKE A LOVE STORY.
APPEARANCE (5/5) - IT LOOKS REALLY NICE. IT IS EASY TO READ AND HAS A GOOD STRUCTURE WHICH DOESN'T LEAD TO CONFUSION.
CHARACTERS/CASTS (8/10)
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT (5/5) - YOUR CHARACTERS DON'T REALLY CHANGE THAT MUCH THOUGH THERE IS JEONGHAN WHO WANTS TO GO BACK TO THE PERSON HE LEFT BECAUSE HE WAS BORED WITH THIS PERSON.
HE APPEARED AS A KIND OF SELFISH PERSON TO ME BECAUSE SURE HE CAN'T BE WITH SOMEONE HE DOESN'T LOVE BUT IT SOUNDED LIKE HE DIDN'T REALLY EXPLAINED THE SITUATION TO SEUNGCHEOL AND JUST LEFT WITHOUT A PROPER ENDING. IT WAS SURPRISING WHEN IN THE END HE WANTS TO SEE SEUNGCHEOL AGAIN AFTER THE REALIZATION OF THE MEANING BEHIND THE BOREDOM HE WAS FEELING HIT HIM BUT IN THIS SITUATION YOU CAN ONLY HOPE THAT HE WILL TALK WITH SEUNGCHEOL ABOUT IT BUT NOT NECESSARILY GETS BACK TOGETHER WITH HIM BECAUSE I DON'T THINK THAT THEY WILL BE HAPPY TOGETHER FOR LONG.
FOR JISOO HE HAS THE CHOICE WHETHER HE WANTS TO MEET JEONGHAN AGAIN OR NOT. MAYBE THEY CAN MEET AGAIN AS FRIENDS BECAUSE AS THE THINGS ARE RIGHT NOW I DON'T THINK THAT JEONGHAN AND JISOO WOULD BE ABLE TO START A RELATIONSHIP. JISOO IS NOT REALLY CHANGING THROUGH THE STORY BUT HE COULD WHEN THE READER CONTINUES THE STORY IN HIS/HER MIND. HE CAN CHOOSE TO CHANGE, TO CONTINUE HIS LIFE AND FIND A NEW LOVE OR TO STOP AND STILL CLING ON HIS OLD ONE. BUT RIGHT NOW HE IS NOT READY FOR A NEW RELATIONSHIP IN MY OPINION SO IT IS NOT THAT BAD THAT JEONGHAN LEFT HIM BEHIND.
CHARACTER'S RELATIONS (3/5) - I DON'T KNOW BUT SOMEHOW IT WAS AWKWARD TO READ THEIR CONVERSATIONS AT ONE POINT AND HOW JEONGHAN ACTED TOWARDS JISOO. THEY ARE STRANGERS IN THE SMALL FERRIES WHEEL CABIN, SURE THEY TALK BUT FOR ME JEONGHAN WAS NOT REALLY THE KIND OF GUY THAT WOULD SUDDENLY START TO COMPLIMENT AND FLIRT WITH A PERSON HE JUST MET THIS AGGRESSIVE. BEFORE THAT EVERYTHING WAS FINE BUT AT THIS POINT BUT THEN IT FELT SO FORCED, THEIR INTERACTIONS LIKE SUDDENLY THEY HAVE TO GET MORE ROMANTIC WITH EACH OTHER WHICH MADE IT A BIT WEIRD, UNCOMFORTABLE FOR ME TO READ IT.
THE AUTHOR'S MINDSET (36/40)
LOGICALLY (10/10) - I WAS ABLE TO FEEL A CONNECTION TO THE STORY AND SEE THAT IT MAKES SENSE HOW EVERYTHING TURNED OUT BECAUSE IT WAS LIKE THERE ARE TWO GUYS THAT JUST WENT THROUGH A BREAK UP AND WANT TO DISTRACT THEMSELVES AFTER IT WHICH IS SOMETHING MANY WILL BE ABLE TO RELATE TO.
ORIGINALITY (10/10) - I DON'T KNOW WHY BUT MANY STORIES I READ WERE LOVE STORIES OR SAD STORIES WITH A HAPPY ENDING SO THIS STORY AND ITS PLOT WAS A NICE CHANGE.
TONE (4/5) - THE MOOD WAS MORE SOBER TO SAD FOR ME BECAUSE OF THESE TWO PEOPLE AND WHAT JUST HAPPENED IN THEIR LIFE SO THAT WAS REALLY NICE BUT THERE IS ONE THING I WANT TO POINT HERE TOO: FOR ME IT WAS NOT REALLY ANGST WHAT HAPPENED AND ALL SO THIS GENRE WAS NOT FULL FILLED IN MY OPINION.
NARRATION (4/5) - OVERALL THEY WERE GOOD UNTIL JEONGHAN AND JISOO MEET AND ENTER THE FERRIES WHEEL CABIN BECAUSE THERE WERE TIMES I WAS NOT SURE ANYMORE WHICH POV WE HAVE RIGHT NOW BECAUSE THERE ARE FLYING CHANGES BETWEEN THE POVS OF JEONGHAN AND JISOO.
STORYLINE (8/10) - THE PLOT IS PRETTY INTERESTING AND I LIKE YOUR DESCRIPTIONS BECAUSE THEY ARE REALLY DETAILED. I AM ONE OF THESE PERSONS THAT LIKE IT WHEN THERE ARE DETAILS IN THE STORY BECAUSE I LOVE TO IMAGINE HOW EVERYTHING COULD LOOK LIKE IN MY HEAD SO YOU MADE IT PRETTY EASILY FOR ME. THE STORY STARTS WITH THE BREAK UP OF JEONGHAN AND SEUNGCHEOL BECAUSE JEONGHAN IS BORED OF THEIR RELATIONSHIP, SEUNGCHEOL BECAUSE HE THINKS HE KNOWS EVERYTHING ABOUT THE OTHER. I ACTUALLY LIKED THIS IDEA BECAUSE THERE IS AN AUTHOR I READ SOME BOOKS OF THAT SAID SOMETHING LIKE WHEN YOU THINK THAT YOU KNOW EVERYTHING ABOUT YOUR PARTNER THE RELATIONSHIP IS DOOMED TO FAIL BECAUSE THE UNKNOWN THINGS IS WHAT KEEPS IT EXCITED SO I LIKED HOW YOU WORKED WITH THIS IDEA TOO.
YOU TELL US ABOUT THE FIRST MEETING OF JEONGHAN AND SEUNGCHEOL AND HOW THEY LIKED EACH OTHER AND HOW THAT ACTUALLY CHANGED BUT AT THE SAME TIME YOU ALSO SHOW THAT HE STILL MISSES SEUNGCHEOL BECAUSE OF ALL THE TIME THEY WERE TOGETHER. YOU SHOW THAT IT IS NOT EASY FOR BOTH PARTS TO GET OVER THE PAST RELATIONSHIP FROM ONE MOMENT TO THE NEXT. THEN JEONGHAN MEETS JISOO AND THEY HAVE A NICE TIME TOGETHER.
IT IS NICE TO SEE HOW THEY CAN HAVE FUN TOGETHER BUT HERE I HAVE TO MENTION AGAIN HOW JEONGHAN STARTS TO FLIRT WITH THE OTHER SUDDENLY. IT MAKES THE FLOW FASTER THAT IT IS ALMOST FEELS LIKE YOU ARE RUSHING THINGS.
YOU TELL US ABOUT THE FIRST MEETING OF JEONGHAN AND SEUNGCHEOL AND HOW THEY LIKED EACH OTHER AND HOW THAT ACTUALLY CHANGED BUT AT THE SAME TIME YOU ALSO SHOW THAT HE STILL MISSES SEUNGCHEOL BECAUSE OF ALL THE TIME THEY WERE TOGETHER. YOU SHOW THAT IT IS NOT EASY FOR BOTH PARTS TO GET OVER THE PAST RELATIONSHIP FROM ONE MOMENT TO THE NEXT. THEN JEONGHAN MEETS JISOO AND THEY HAVE A NICE TIME TOGETHER.
IT IS NICE TO SEE HOW THEY CAN HAVE FUN TOGETHER BUT HERE I HAVE TO MENTION AGAIN HOW JEONGHAN STARTS TO FLIRT WITH THE OTHER SUDDENLY. IT MAKES THE FLOW FASTER THAT IT IS ALMOST FEELS LIKE YOU ARE RUSHING THINGS.
JISOO TELLS JEONGHAN ABOUT HIS PAST RELATIONSHIP AND HOW IT ENDED BECAUSE THE OTHER WAS BORED AND THAT HE ACTUALLY DIDN'T LOVE HIM BECAUSE OTHERWISE THEY COULD HAVE OVERCOME THIS TOGETHER. IT MAKES YOU ACTUALLY THINK ABOUT JEONGHAN BECAUSE HE BROKE UP WITH SEUNGCHEOL BECAUSE OF THE EXACT SAME REASON. WHEN THEY LEAVE THE FERRIES WHEEL AGAIN JEONGHAN LEAVES JISOO TO VISIT SEUNGCHEOL LEAVING JISOO BEHIND WHO NOW HAS THE OPTION TO JUST FORGET ABOUT THE OTHER OR TO MEET HIM AGAIN SOMEHOW.
I LIKE THIS ENDING BECAUSE IT IS NOT A TYPICAL HAPPY ENDING WHICH IS JUST LIKE THE REAL LIFE BUT ALSO BECAUSE YOU LEAVE IT TO THE READER TO USE THEIR FANTASY FOR WHAT HAPPENS NEXT JUST LIKE A ONE-SHOT SHOULD BE IN MY OPINION.
PROPER USE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE (25/25)
PROPER GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION (10/10) - I DIDN'T FIND ANY MAJOR MISTAKES THAT WOULD BE DISTRACTING WHILE READING YOUR STORY.
TERMINOLOGY (5/5) - YOUR VOCABULARY IS GOOD TOO BECAUSE THERE IS NO OVERUSE OF WORDS OR PHRASES BUT YOU USE DIFFERENT WORDS TO KEEP THE STORY INTERESTING.
LANGUAGE BARRIER (10/10) - THERE IS NO OVERUSE OF THE KOREAN LANGUAGE.
REVIEWER'S ENJOYMENT (4/5)
OVERALL I DID ENJOY YOUR STORY BUT THE THINGS I TRIED TO EXPLAIN YOU ABOVE PREVENTED ME FROM ENJOYING YOUR STORY WITH MY WHOLE HEART. I STILL REALLY LIKE THE IDEA OF THE PLOT AND YOUR WRITING STYLE IS NICE TOO.
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