Psycho - CamilleVendetta
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Author: CamilleVendetta
Reviewed By: kpoperrose
Requested Date: 11/06/15
Review Completion: 12/06/15
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Title: 8/10
Logical: 3/3
The title connects to the plot as Jongin is portrayed as a 'psycho' in this story.
Eye-catching: 2/3
This is a common word and people might have their expectations, so they might skip over this but it may interest some people as well.
Original: 3/4
There is another story titled 'Psycho'. It's main pairing is Taoris and you may find it here: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/634550/psycho-angst-dark-horror-taoris-sulay-chantao
Description/Foreword: 10/10
Summary: 5/5
The summary is very intriguing and well written.
Appearance: 5/5
It is very neat as everything is organized well.
Character Development/Showcasing: 7/10
Development: 3/5
Jongin does not actually change a lot as his motives and core personality is the same; a psycho who still does stuff for his own gain. The thing that changes is the fact that he has fallen in love with Taemin and trusts him.
Relation/Cast: 4/5
Jongin's interactions with his family is pretty reasonable and realistic. It's a bit weird that he doesn't feel a bit of love towards any of them, but maybe it was made that way so readers could see the extent of his insanity.
Taemin trying to get close to Jongin by stealing from shops was a bit unbelievable but he was what made the story happen.
Behind the Author's Mind: 31/40
Logical: 7/10
The fact that Taemin would do anything for Jongin to continue to love him is relatable and some people actually do experience that. The more illogical thing is how Jongin became such a big name alone with no connections at all.
Original: 8/10
Points were docked because writing a psychopath's story isn't very original.
Tone: 5/5
From the way the author writes, it seems as if she has found her style of writing.
Naration: 5/5
It is written in Jongin's point of view and is consistent throughout the story.
Storyline: 6/10
The storyline moves at a constant pace and it was pretty smooth but the story seems a bit complicated because the author's trying to juggle explaining Jongin's change of character, his improving career and his resolve towards everything else. This causes the story to become all over the place.
Proper Use of the English Language: UNGRADED
Due to the author's request, this section is ungraded.
General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 2/5
I had to actually push myself to read this piece. The reason for this is probably the fact that the story's all over the place and it gets tiring to read overtime. There were a lot of grammar mistakes as well and I hope you and your beta-reader are working to fix these mistakes.
Total points: 58/75
A little note from me
The score might not be so high but I am a pretty harsh marker so don't be discouraged^^ I hope that the grammar mistake are being fixed and I look forward to seeing how the story turns out. If you have any questions, feel free to pm me :D I'm also very sorry that you had to wait a long time for this review.
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