NOTE: One shot - completed

(9.5/10) Title: It's unique and actually fits in with the story. I give you thumbs up. Stories that have a title like an actual book are the ones that catch interest for everyone. It's great that you didn't name the story "I Drew You A Self Protrait" or "My Dream Girl Drawing" or something just disturbing greasy. 

(0/10) Character: There is no character development in this story. Taemin drew a picture of Krystal and the rest of SHINee had their hormones all over their own creations. Kystal showed up at the end and as if she had the power to acknowlegde everything around her she knew that she was Taemin's dream girl. 

(8/10) Originality: Errh, this is the first time I've ever crossed a story as cheesy as yours. Because I don't usually read one-shots nor stories like this, it's original because it's my first one. However don't think that because I haven't come across stories like this, there are a lot more just like this, I just haven't read them. 

(18/40) Storyline/Plot: This is something you want me to focus on so it's going to be somewhat a long paragraph if you don't mind. 

First off, the description matched the storyline real well but when I started the chapter everything was happening so fast. Is this just a scene taken from a class period? A background is what you need and it can be anything. 

An example would be; I smacked my hand down on my alarm clock when it erupted into an alarm. Rubbing the crust from the corner of my eyes I got out of bed and headed towards the bathroom. Turning on the nob I let the water run while I get my clot...

Another could be; "Are you ready for art?" Key asked, nudging me in the ribs. I scowled at him and turn away to finish my food. It was lunch period and I spent it with my other four friends. Jonghyun and Minho were throwing their food at each other while Onew was crying at the edge of the bench because he finished all his chic... 

Something so everyone gets a view of where they are or what they were doing. Are they at an art academy? A regular high school? Or are they recieving private lessons with a few others from an art teacher because they're rich enough to afford one?

Just a starter to ease into the story smoothly. The flow was way to fast, especially at the end. When they left did Krystal just randomly walked up to the shrine and out of all the other students she just found Taemin's because the picture matched her features so well? At the end how does Krystal know that she's his dream girl? Is she a next door neighbor that listens to Taemin sleep talk?  

I also expect them to know who Taemin's dream girl is after he drew her because they knew who Girl's Generation were. Unless F(X) doesn't exist in your story, then that's something I understand.

Reviewer's troll comment; It would've made more sense if they said that she looked like Yoona. 

(21/25) Grammar/Errors: I told another author this and I'm not afraid to tell you, I don't really like stories that fuse Korean language into randomly, so that deducted some errors points. This is an English website, if you wanted to have Korean in it then write the whole thing in Korean. 

I'm impressed because you said that English is not your first language. On the other hand something you need to fix is your punctuation. Your periods need to be at the end of each sentence. At the end those eleven periods were not needed. Why don't your distribute those into your story?

Note: If I've made a mistake myself or you think the correction isn't needed or right, comment down below so I can fix it or explain it to you. 

(2.5/5) Overall Enjoyment: Too short, it was just a small scene with an idea slapped in. I know that one-shots are suppose to be short, but is this even a one-shot? There was no support for the idea.   

(59/100) Points Total

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