Title (5/5)

I feel that the title was completely fitting, considering it was based off of something that dealt with the story.

Description/ Foreword (8/10)

I actually think the description was very good. It wasn’t the most eye catching thing I have ever read and if you didn’t tell me to review the story, I probably wouldn’t have read the story at all. But in all honesty the foreword really didn’t do anything to intrigue me at all. I feel like the description could be left the way it is and do something different with the foreword, but that is just my opinion.

 Characters (10/10)    

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED YOUR CHARACTERS! I don’t know why though, I think it was because Hyunhee was more realistic then some of the girls in other stories. I also liked Hyomin. But I think you kept true to her personality throughout the story. So I gave you full points on your characters.

 Plot (17/20)

Okay now I have seen plots like this before, and I’m not going to lie. At first I kind of predicted how the story would turn out because I’ve read it before basically. I am not saying you copied or anything, because you didn’t. But I will say I got bored at first but then something happened and I was hooked within a couple chapters later. I really think all my thoughts kind of disappeared and it suddenly became a different plot, it was weird. But that is the truth; you added so many little twists and things that kept me hooked on.

 Grammar (17/20)

I honestly don’t have many complaints or criticisms for your grammar. But you did have a few spelling errors and a couple of words that were misplaced, and there was a sentence that was completely confusing and made absolutely no sense in one of the beach chapters. But honestly besides that you wrote full sentences and it was practically perfect. Also you used large words and I tend to fall into a writer story when I see a huge intriguing word, and you had millions.

 Flow (5/10)

This was the bad part; you honestly seemed to skip around way too much. I mean for some parts it was okay because it seemed to fit, but in one chapter she was eating dinner with Super Junior, the next it was talking about Hyomin having a dream about Henry. Then it went back to the dinner scene, it was just a little confusing. Also that funky sentence you had when Hyomin had her little accident.

 Visual Things (15/15)

Nothing was wrong with your text; no distracting pictures so yeh, full points.

Ending (--/10)

Your story did not end, so this will not count towards your end score.

Extra Comments: I honestly can say I actually liked this story. I surprised myself when I actually got caught up in it, because normally I am someone who loves action, mystery and kind of dark twisted stories. But I can honestly say I fell in love with your writing. I don’t know why but I just do, I mean you were very descriptive and I liked that. The first chapters didn’t catch me but something later on just kept me hooked onto the plot. What surprised me even more was it was a story about super junior. I normally don’t read stories about super Junior; though I love them I just don’t read their fanfics. So you got me to read things I normally would never even touch so congrats! Also if Hyomin was meant to be from T-ara, I didn’t care because her character was actually good. To be honest I am not a fan of T-ara (Don’t hate!) I never was a fan of theirs; I in fact am even mutual on the bullying topic, but yeh. So I honestly LOVED your story! Good luck!

Total (77/90)

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