Title (5/5)

It was very fitting from what I was able to read and register so far. The title was intriguing and I think I would’ve read it and clicked on it. But not personally because of the main characters, I love Super junior and SNSD, trust me. I just don’t like reading stories about them! But the title was perfect!

 Description/ Foreword (9/10)

The description and foreword personally were amazing, very intriguing and well written. It was the last part about all the many characters in the story that was frustrating to me. I mean I normally don’t like when characters are introduced in the foreword, because I kind of want to be surprised. But I guess it’s understandable since there are so many of them and certain readers might get confused and lost.  But it kind of made me lose interest very quickly, but you shouldn’t change it because like I said certain readers might need it.

 Characters (7/10)

I can’t say the characters are unique or different. Or that they completely developed at all, but I can say I loved them all so much. They were like an actual group of friends and I felt like part of that group of friends as I continued to read through it. So I can safely say you made a lot of good characters who are relatable. But maybe too many characters

 Plot (18/20)

The beginning of the story was a bit plain and took me a while to actually get into the flow of things. Mainly because I normally don’t read stories with SHINee,SNSD or Superjunior as the main characters, even if I am a fan of them. But once the real stuff happened I was really into it. Some chapters were a bit plain or boring but when it got intense, it got intense. I absolutely loved it, and I can safely say I’ve never read a story with a plot quite like this.

Grammar (16/20)

You had some incomplete sentences every once in a while, spelling errors and that was about it.

 Flow (8/10)

It flowed nicely for the most part. But like I said occasionally a little mistake would throw me off just a bit.

Visual Things (14/15)

Poster didn’t do much for the story, sorry. But everything else was perfect.

 Ending (--/10)

Didn’t have an ending so won’t be counted towards your final score.

Extra Comments:

I tend to be a girl who is into action, darkness, creep and maybe a little gore or horror. This story would probably never be considered my exact cup of tea, but it did the job none the less. I really think if you edited some chapters, you could have a story to die for. I really see a lot of potential in your writing style, so all I have to say is good luck and looking forward to hearing from you! ^^

Total (77/90)

Entwined Destinies

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