Title (4/5)

I absolutely loved the title, it was unique and eye catching. Just it might’ve made some people a bit confused.

Description/ Foreword (--/10)

You didn’t really have a description, so I didn’t grade you on it. But it might’ve been better with one, just saying.

Characters (10/10)

I swear I wanted to give you bonus points in this category, but that would be kind of weird. I absolutely loved the characters. I am not a Sone but I do love SNSD and this story made me love them more. I could not have loved the way you portrayed the characters. I love how you changed them up a bit form their real selves but still kept them a bit true to their real selves.  I mean Yoona was such a powerful character but wasn’t the main. Sunny was just impressive, Tiffany made me feel inspired. Don’t even get me started on Taeyeon (my bias), you made her just about ten times cooler then she already is. You didn’t stray from your original ideas and I loved that, congrats on amazing character development too.

Plot (20/20)

I honestly cannot say I have read a story like this, with such a meaningful theme and amazing plot. I mean every page was a new beginning with a breath taking ending that left me wandering. I cannot forget this story or the plot, ever.

Grammar (18/20)

This of course is where everyone screws up just a bit. I mean you were pretty much perfect with your grammar for the most part. But you had some problems with spacing in the first couple of chapters. Then in later chapters it got a bit sloppy but it was actually minor things. Such as a missing semi-colon, misplaced words and around one misspelled word and a couple of wacky sentences. But your vocabulary made me love this story more than I expected, keep using those words because they were just amazing.(Sorry I am a nut when it comes to vocabulary ^^).

 Flow (10/10)

I was a bit surprised; I was never caught off guard by the change that came with every chapter. You did chapter breaks at the right times and I never got the least bit confused.

Visual Things (15/15)

No complaints or skepticism here. You did great with the font style and I love the chapter headings, it made it seem like a real story.

Ending (10/10)

I cannot even begin to explain how beautiful the ending was. I mean honestly I could and still cannot think of a better way for the story to end. It was perfect.

Extra Comments:

Oh my God, I cannot wrap my brain around the utter perfection I just read. I did not move from my chair for hours reading and analyzing this masterpiece. Though there were minor errors, it doesn’t matter that was pure perfection and nothing less than that. I know I sound like a weirdo, but I seriously think you were born to write. I’m not saying that is what you should be or it is your passion, heck I don’t even know you. But I cannot sit here and say that your story didn’t blow my mind, because it did!

Total (87/90)

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