Title (4/5)

The title did fit the story because it pretty much talks about how he isn’t perfect, how she’s not so perfect and how her career isn’t perfect. However it was boring and didn’t really catch my attention t all-I honestly probably would’ve scrolled past it without a problem if I saw it on here.

Description/ Foreword (4/10)

Not exactly interesting or eye catching, normally you use the foreword to capture the reader’s attention but it seemed like you mainly used it to introduce the main character which is normally what the first chapter is for. Also when you type the introduction you don’t want to have any misspelled words or misused words either and a majority of your foreword was misspelled or misused words which will in fact turn people away who want to read a story with proper English or at least proper spelling. Also it did kind of give away too much-though you wrote only a little bit for the foreword-you practically gave away everything that would happen by saying being bossed around and forced to do unbearable things-then going onto mention becoming Infinite’s and Myungsoo’s manager. It’s literally like you are throwing the plot into our faces as well as when you put the character descriptions in you basically gave away the whole plot which would cause reader’s to not want to even give your story a chance.

Characters (4/10)

No character uniqueness what so ever. They lacked dept, and original personalities. The classic short tempered girl who becomes a softy around her crush and is such a sweety except for around that one guy, the classic rude, rich and famous man with a nasty personality. It’s extremely cliché and doesn’t keep someone wanting to read more-the characters are not relatable. They lack emotion of any sort because you never really describe their emotions at all or how she or he feels in depth. If readers can’t understand in full detail what the main characters are feeling, how they look, how they react then they can’t relate or get attached to the characters.

Plot (5/20)

No uniqueness once again-all of it was very predictable. The whole bad boy, good girl and good boy love triangle. Having a higher up who is extremely attractive be in charge of you but be a total douche bag.  I lost interest the moment I started reading the first page. I pretty much knew what was going to happen throughout the whole story after I read the foreword-therefore reading through the nine chapters was a complete bore and confusing as well. Lacked originality, lacked anything new and exciting, and lacked anything to keep a reader captivated. You also lacked description of any of the situations, surroundings or the characters making the story nothing but dialogue.

Grammar (5/20)

A majority of your story was a misuse of periods, throwing them where ever you could and when I read through it, it came out choppy in my head. A period is a silent pause within the text so when people read it they keep pausing between every couple of words while reading your story, which means an overabundance of periods, means a lack of comas and semi-colons. Which means multiple sentences could’ve been made easier to read. Not to mention you misused multiple words as well as misspelled almost one word every other sentence. You confused multiple homophones so I thought I could help you with that here is a little guide to Homophones.

Knew: the past tense of knowing something.

New: Something of a recent origin.

Know: To have information of or to understand-present tense.

Now: Happening at that very moment.

Their: the possessive form of They

They’re: A contraction for ’they are’

There: in or at that place

These are only a few of the words you mixed up. Also if you’re going to use many Korean words please put the meaning of those words at the end of each chapter or somewhere in the chapter so people who don’t know Korean can understand your story. Also you kept skipping around from past tense to present tense throughout the story. Even in one sentence which is extremely confusing and makes reading the story really hard and uncomfortable. Either use all present tense verbs, nouns and etc.  Or past tense ones. Because of all the errors in your grammar the story was extremely hard to understand and read.

Flow (4/10)

You jumped around a lot, from her being awake and doing this to her suddenly fast asleep and Myungsoo finding her and waking her up. Every chapter or update was dealing with what seemed like a different day, or a different venue-everything was just everywhere.  

Visual Things (10/15)

The poster was beautiful. The text and font in some of the chapters was too small and it seemed on occasion that the font changed form chapter to chapter which can be a bit of a headache to keep up with. But besides that it was good.  

Ending (--/10)

Not there, so won’t count towards final score.

Extra Comments:

First I am sincerely sorry this took me forever to finish reading and for me to actually update and post this for you. Secondly I am sorry if I was a bit harsh but when you request from me this is what you need to expect. Thirdly this story honestly wasn’t my cup of tea and I hate to say that. But I have read so many stories like yours and without a specific plot twist or amazing little detail that completely makes the story a huge page turner I won’t read it. So that basically concludes my review of your story! ^^

Total (36/90)

Not So Perfect

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