Title (4/5)

The title was definitely fitting and didn’t give away too much in my opinion. However, if I was searching through AFF and I came across the story, I would’ve gone right past it.

 Description/ Foreword (7/10)

I will give you credit for your Description, because that actually was good, and it intrigued me, just a little bit though. But the Foreword kind of bored me and annoyed me a bit, mainly because I am pretty sure Myungsoo has never said those words.  

Characters (8/10)

Your characters were original for the most part, mainly because most stories I see about Myungsoo or Jiyeon, the two of them are bullies or nasty. It was a bit refreshing.

Plot (20/20)

Your plot was different I guess. It didn’t bring tears to my eyes or make me feel something. But that may be because I don’t understand where this couple came from in the first place; they kind of were made up out of nowhere. So I can’t ever really get into stories about this ‘couple’. But the overall plot was very beautiful, and I like that you put it in Myungsoo’s point of view, since it is rare for a story on here to do it from the boys point of view.

Grammar (13/20)

You didn’t have any spelling errors, but you did seem to have trouble typing and expressing certain things.

“It turned out her father was my best friend’s father.”

I am pretty sure you meant to type: it turned out her father was my father’s best friend.

Also you wrote “I closed my eyes as multiple raindrops stung a little when it fell into my eyes.”

It would’ve flowed better if it was written like this: My eyes closed in an attempt to stop the rain from hurting my eyes any longer.

You also had many other mistakes that made it a bit hard to read.

 Flow (5/10)

Because of the many messed up sentences and awkward placement of certain words, it was very hard to read smoothly.

 Visual Things (14/15)

I don’t know what you did to your font or whatever it was, but it was kind of distracting me from reading your one shot. But besides that it was fine.

Ending (10/10)

The ending left me curious and a bit unsatisfied, but I guess there was no better way to end it.

 Extra Comments:

Like I said before it was bit hard for me to read and I am a huge Infinite fan too. But I hate it when random idol couples pop up. Like I am sorry, I don’t mean to offend any Jiyeon x Myungsoo shippers, but I don’t see where this couple came from. I don’t enjoy a story when random couples like this are the main focus. But I tried not to let that affect my judgment on the story. Good luck, because I can see you being an amazing writer in the future.

Total (81/100)

Memory in the Rain

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