Report Card- Petals In The Fire by Kakurine039. Chapters 1 - 16 

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Title : (1/2) Was it eye-catching? Does it fit the fic?

For me, it wasn't totally 'eye-catching' but it was interesting in a way. As for if it fit the fic... I'm not quite sure yet. Maybe there's some creative reason behind it.

Description & Foreword : (2/2) did it get me curious/interested? Did it give too much information or totally off topic?

It totally got me interested. I was surprised that it did too, since I'm not one for Vampire fics. The foreword got me interested too. Not too much information, and i liked that.

Originality: (4.5/5) Was it different from other fics out there?

Now, right when I looked at the tags and saw 'vampires'... I wasn't all pumped to read this lol. I sat there for a bit like," ... Oh Shisus.." BUT THEN, as I read on I was so glad you didn't include werewolves. I was like bowing down to my computer screen haha. Instead you made it your own; screw werewolves! Go Demi-Gods! I marked 5 points right when i didn't see werewolves, but I think the vampire thing is used a lot. I only took off a half a point since instead of reading the word vampire over and over, I saw Tanvesas.

Overall Appearance/Neatness: (5/5) How were things like your background, poster, and font? Did I have trouble reading due to any font ?

Very Neat and organized. No trouble reading it due to the font or anything like that. Background wasn't distracting and the poster was nice. The only little peeve I had was how many times you probably clicked 'enter' at times aha. However I don't think it's worth taking a point off.

Word Choice & Descriptiveness: (5/6) Did you have a wide range in variety with words? Was I able to visualize things in my head easily with your words?

VERY big and wide range of vocab. I had to pause and look up some words while I was reading. I loved how it was so easy to picture things in my head just with your words. All I had to do was read, close my eyes for a second and bam! There it was in my head. One point off because I think instead of showing a picture of what each weapon looked like in the A/N, you could have describe them instead.

Story Flow: (9/10) Were things going by smoothly or was it confusing and jerky?

I like how you would have like a one sentence recap so that the flow went smoothly. I only had one occasion where I was confused at what happened. other than that, smooth sailing.

Grammar, Sentence Fluency, and etc : (16/20) I’m a semi-grammar freak so grammar is a big thing for me. Grammar, spelling, and all the good stuff in this section. Except this part of the grading to be stricter.

It was so hard to find a grammar mistake. Which is a good thing, but there were still a few floating around. There were a few spelling mistakes here and there. Some forgotten punctuation every once in a while. No issues with commas or periods. ^__^

Plot: (20/20): Very important. Was it interesting? Was it well written?

Interesting, very interesting in fact. Well written as well. Also unique, despite the idea of vampires being involved. Full points.

Writing Style and Format : (19/20) How was the layout/formatting? Was your style easy to figure out and read? How does it look? Was it professional looking? Etc.

It looked fairly professional looking - except for the large gaps that bugged me a bit. I think after having a thought however, you could have added some thing like;

thoughtsthoughtsthoughts. He thought to himself.

Or something like that, because it got a little confusing as to who thought what after more characters were introduced.

Overall Enjoyment: (8/10) How much I liked your fic overall.

Vampire fics aren't really my thing but this fic was an exception. It was interesting and I enjoyed reading it.... with an exception for the that would show up lol. I kinda had to pull myself together to get through them just because i feel uncomfortable reading . But overall, I really did enjoy it.

Total: 89.5/100

EXTRA CREDIT~! A CHANCE for more points and also a possibility that more points will get taken off…

Characters: (1/3) Were your characters well developed? Did they have a voice to them?

Lots of voice to your characters with their thoughts.

Chapter Titles: (0/2) Did you even have them? Did they go with the chapter? Were they creative?

No points since even though you DID have chapter titles, at the beginning they didn't really have anything to do with the chapter.

My Feels: (1.5/5) What were my reactions to events? Did you get me to laugh, or crack a smile, resist the urge to throw something at the computer screen, cry, etc? All that good stuff. *Note- Points will be taken off if I ever had any “ What the hell did I just read” moments.

This fic got some smiles and a small laugh here and there. Oh Kevin.. lol.

Twists & Turns + Cliffhangers: (0/2) Did you have them? If you did, were they creative or gasp worthy?

I think there's one thing that could have been considered a 'twist' but it wasn't big enough to like shock me. it was more of a dull, ' Woah didn't expect that.'
Anything Else: (1/3) Anything else praise worthy or points off?

First vampire fic that I actually wouldn't mind reading more of. I can't wait for your next request :]

Notes/ Comments from Me (no points):

I don't think there's much to improve on. In my opinion, I think you could have had Kiseop explain Kevin everything like all the cities and everything instead of having a A/N at the end of each chapter explaining it. Those gaps. lol. Other than that, GREAT fic you have going on. ^__^ I hope you request again so I can see what happens. - Also, you didn't fully read the rules since you seemed to forget to put if English was your first language. Same with your request for the other fic, but I'll let it slide for now. I only didn't see it becaus eI was too excited that I got a request. -__-

Final Total: 93/100