Report Card - A Hazy Shade of Winter by Maudmoonshine. Chapters 1-5.

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Title : (1.5/2) Was it eye-catching? Does it fit the fic? Would I have clicked on it?

Personally I would have been contemplating on if I wanted to read it based on the title. Fits the fic.

Description & Foreword : (0/2) Did it get me curious/interested? Did it give too much information or totally off topic? Was it a proper description and foreword?

That excerpt is more of a foreword than a description, I suggest moving it to that section. Also the part that is about how it's an AU  along with poster and review credits should also be in the foreword. Not the description.

Originality: (5/5) Was it different from other fics out there? Were you able to make it your own in a way?

Very different from usual fics. With slight cliches but overall, different to my eyes.

Overall Appearance/Neatness: (5/5) How were things like your background, poster, and font? Did I have trouble reading due to any font ?

Neat neat neat.

Word Choice & Descriptiveness: (4/6) Did you have a wide range in variety with words? Was I able to visualize things in my head easily with your words?

Very nice range of words. A nice picture in my head but at the same time it was a bit blurry. For example, what does Eunhyuk look like? What does Sarah look like that make clients go crazy? The only time I really got a picture in my head was in the very last chapter but even that wasn't much.

Story Flow: (8/10) Were things going by smoothly or was it confusing and jerky?

Very smooth. Although the narrating chopped things up a bit.

Grammar, Sentence Fluency, and etc : (18/20) I’m a semi-grammar freak GRAMMAR NAZI so grammar is a big thing for me. Grammar, spelling, and all the good stuff in this section. Except this part of the grading to be stricter. Seriously.  You will lose big points for this. Keep in mind, that deep within , I am probably a grammar dictator. D-I-C-T-A-T-O-R.

I honestly was too into the plot that I didn't even pay attention to the grammar. So you did fine with tenses and plurals. Formatting wise, although it was so close to perfect, there were some small spacing errors. nothing big. Just forgetting to space your sentence apart a bit. Avoid using 'and' to start your sentences too.

Plot: (18/20): Very important. Was it interesting? Was it well written? Was I able to get into it or did I start losing interest? Etc

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It was breathtaking for me. Held my interest the entire time, although I was a bit confused on some things.

Writing Style and Format : (19/20) How was the layout/formatting? Was your style easy to figure out and read? How does it look? Was it professional looking? Etc.

Beautifully formatted. Professional looking.

Overall Enjoyment: (8/10) How much I liked your fic overall.

Total: 86.5/100

BUT WAIT- THERE’S EXTRA CREDIT~! A CHANCE for more points and also a possibility that more points will get taken off…

Characters: (0/3) Were your characters well developed? Did they have a voice to them?

More development and voice would have been nice.

Chapter Titles: (0/2) Did you even have them? Did they go with the chapter? Were they creative?

My Feels: (0/5) What were my reactions to events? Did you get me to laugh, or crack a smile, resist the urge to throw something at the computer screen, cry, etc? All that good stuff. *Note- Points will be taken off if I ever had any “ What the hell did I just read” moments.

Twists & Turns + Cliffhangers: (0/2) Did you have them? Were they creative or gasp worthy?

Anything Else: (1/3) Anything else praise worthy or points off?

I absolutely love how you did the narration.

Notes/ Comments:
That disclaimers in the first chapter, and others should maybe also be put in the foreword or at the end of the chapter. the color choice is a pain to the eyes, or maybe just mine. Also maybe that little chunk you have after the excerpt in chapter one could be the description. That snippet caught my attention. Why you were inspired to write this fic should also be in the foreword.  i don't see why the first chapter was rated M, or the other chapters that were rated M. Yeah sure they were 'violent' and whatnot but it's not like it was describe intensely to the point where i wanted to puke and it wasn't . I think I've said all I needed/wanted to say. Keep up the great work ^__^

Final Total: 86.5/100