Report Card - The Proposal by shineecrazed. Chapters 1-2.

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Title : (1/2) Was it eye-catching? Does it fit the fic? Would I have clicked on it?

Fits but I wouldn't have clicked on it. It gives most of the plot away and thus if I were scrolling through fics, I would have gone right past it.

Description & Foreword : (1/2) Did it get me curious/interested? Did it give too much information or totally off topic? Was it a proper description and foreword?

I'm curious as to what happens. However, I feel like for your description maybe you should just use the second half of what you have at the moment or use a variation of the brief summary you gave me. As for the foreword, I feel like it's okay for a oneshot to have an alternate ending for a second chapter, but now as I'm reviewing it there's 3 so I'm kind of sitting here confused.

Originality: (4.5/5) Was it different from other fics out there? Were you able to make it your own in a way?

I felt like you did make it your own in a way. With how Myungsoo is and the plot but it was slightly cliche as well.

Overall Appearance/Neatness: (4/5) How were things like your background, poster, and font? Did I have trouble reading due to any font ?

The font color is a bit too light, maybe it's just my eyes though. There's a lot of white-ness since you spaced things out to be organized. But other than that, it was very neat.

Word Choice & Descriptiveness: (4/6) Did you have a wide range in variety with words? Was I able to visualize things in my head easily with your words?

A decent range of words. But not much visualizing went on in my head, it was like watching a movie without my glasses on which mean blurry. Sure there was that descriptive scene at the end of the first chapter but I feel like you could have dug deeper.

What does your OC even look like? What does Myungsoo look like? Etc etc.

Story Flow: (8/10) Were things going by smoothly or was it confusing and jerky?

The chapters were pretty much chopped into two parts each. But other than that, it was smooth.

Grammar, Sentence Fluency, and etc : (18/20) I’m a semi-grammar freak GRAMMAR NAZI so grammar is a big thing for me. Grammar, spelling, and all the good stuff in this section. Except this part of the grading to be stricter. Seriously.  You will lose big points for this. Keep in mind, that deep within , I am probably a grammar dictator. D-I-C-T-A-T-O-R.

Almost perfect. So close to perfect. When the same person is talking it's typically in the same 'chunk' of writing but you spaced out yours. Also capitalizing things after a talking part or not putting a comma.

Plot: (18/20): Very important. Was it interesting? Was it well written? Was I able to get into it or did I start losing interest? Etc.

For interesting me.. it was a decent amount of interest I had. Fairly well written.

Writing Style and Format : (18/20) How was the layout/formatting? Was your style easy to figure out and read? How does it look? Was it professional looking? Etc.

Neat, the only complaint I would have it about how much you spaced out things but other than that, great.

Overall Enjoyment: (8/10) How much I liked your fic overall.

Total: 66.5/100

BUT WAIT- THERE’S EXTRA CREDIT~! A CHANCE for more points and also a possibility that more points will get taken off…

Characters: (0/3) Were your characters well developed? Did they have a voice to them?

I feel like there could have been more voice and developing with your characters. Just somehow I feel like you could have added in more but I myself am not quite sure how.

Chapter Titles: (0/2) Did you even have them? Did they go with the chapter? Were they creative?

My Feels: (.5/5) What were my reactions to events? Did you get me to laugh, or crack a smile, resist the urge to throw something at the computer screen, cry, etc? All that good stuff. *Note- Points will be taken off if I ever had any “ What the hell did I just read” moments.

My lips twitched up right when Myungsoo talked haha. I thought it was cute of him to do that. Regarding the first original chapter, it totally caught me off guard.

The alternate ending with the peas just made me look at the screen, in my head judging Myungsoo.

Twists & Turns + Cliffhangers: (1/2) Did you have them? Were they creative or gasp worthy?

Trolled. That tis all.

Anything Else: (0/3) Anything else praise worthy or points off?

Notes/ Comments :

I personally think that if the swearing isn't 'intense' then you don't need the rated M on the chapter.  I feel that if the fic is going to have a just a couple chapters with a Rated M warning it should be due to 'stronger' curse words like for example ; . isn't all that rated M worthy lol. i feel like this could have been longer but it's fine as a short and sweet (except for the first chapter) fic. I don't really want to go into the title in mroe depth since I don't want to spoil the whole plot, but you may PM again if you would like more help. Keep up the great work with any other fics you decide to write : )

Final Total : 68/100