Taiwan-wawa Review

Review story for : I LOVE YOU

I Love You by Cutielolly143

http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/iloveyoouu143/

Reviewed by Tina

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Title: 5/5

Well, as of right now, even though the title doesn’t match the story yet, I really like a title simple like this. Really good!

Poster/Background: 6/10

You should get a poster and background. I think if you have one, it will attract others than just having a colored background! But then I still give you props!

Forewords: 9/10

Your foreword was great. It talked about who the characters were, and that’s what I look in for a foreword when I read a story.

Plot: 13/15

This plot was great. I really liked it. But the thing is, I have read a couple of stories like this before, but then yours is a little better.

Creativity/Originality: 13/15

You have a creative mind to think of a story like this. I am kind of mad how Hebe is a bad girl here, but then it’s still good though. You’re not the only one who has Hebe as a mean girl. My cousin wrote her story and has Hebe being evil to GuiGui too. Hehe.

Flow: 7/10
Well, your flow was a BIT too fast. How in the beginning GuiGui’s mom got her a plane ticket already. A little too fast. Also, Aaron already treat her nicely. Shouldn’t he keep her away from him some more? But then again, your story is great!

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
Uhmm, your spelling are correct, but your grammar and vocabularies aren’t as good. I kind of had a hard time reading your story, but then it was ok.

Characterizations: 8/10

Your characters were good. I liked them a lot. But then again, I think GuiGui and Aaron have gotten a little bit too close.

Writing Style: 6/10

Your writing style is good, but then I think you could’ve done a bit better.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

I really enjoyed your story! I was interested in reading your story when I first read your forewords already. You have such good ideas and details!

Sub Total:74/100

Bonus:5/5

I give you bonus points, because you deserve it after writing such a cute story. Your story is great, and I am your new reader as of today, so keep up the good work!

Total:79/100
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A/N: omg ! thanks to Tina from taiwan-wawa-storyiloveyou.blogspot.com/ for the Review ! (: