7thhaven The Memory By syamimiyana R Read Story ◀ View Author ◀ Credit Us ◀   Reviewer Choden   Duration 12.11.15 to 12.13.15   Genre angst, school life   Characters Bts   Overall Grade 65%   KEYpoints Title: 3/5 The story is supposed to be about a girl and how her experiences of getting bullied changed her. The title, however, seems to be very vast and versatile. Since the story is still ongoing, it doesn’t give a clear picture of which memory it is talking about: her memory as a victim or her present memories with Jungkook.

Poster: 4/5 I usually don’t look at the posters. So yeah, this is it I guess XD XD XD

Description + Foreword: 7/10
“Your skin isn’t a paper, don’t CUT it.
Your face isn’t a mask, don’t HIDE it.
Your size isn’t a book, don’t JUDGE it.
Your life isn’t a film, don’t END it.”

These lines really touched me. It gives a clear picture of what a victim feels like. And your line, “your words are power,” reminded me of what Hitler said, “Language is power.”

But I recommend you to add something about the story. You know something like a preview to your story. Add something about the key word but also how it is related to the main characters.

As for the foreword, this part:

“Jeon Jungkook is the richest among the gang called BTS. Even though he is the youngest one, he is still the head of the group. He has everything but the only one he doesn’t have is…MANNER. Could a girl change his manners?”

It is more suited in the description section than in the foreword. Otherwise, I think its fine.

Layout: 3/5 It was smooth at first but after sometime, became a bit bulky. I’ve noticed you tend to change the mood/tone very rapidly like from bad to good to worst. Especially Jungkook, his tone and feelings