Revelare By: nightlock08. Title 5/5: Yout title fits the kind of story you are writing, and it fits the plot very well~

Poster 55:  Your poster was very well done, and eye catching^^

Description & Foreword 10/10: Your description and foreword are great! I really liked how you worded everything.
Layout 5/5: Your story is very organized and neat. 

Characterization 15/15: You are very deatiled with your characters! Which is a very good thing, and you should keep it up. The way your characters spoke, just blew my mind, and i enjoyed it very much! And the characters actions, and feelings felt so real, that i could imagine myself being them.

Plot 30/30: Your plot was very well thought out, and the story it-self turned out great. The flow of the the story was just right, it didn't go too slow or too fast, and everything was very well detailed. 


Grammar and vocabulary 20/20: From what i could see, there were no grammar mistakes, which is a good bonus, haha. Your punctuation is good.

Personal Enjoyment 10/10: I enjoyed the story, Keep writing!^^ Fighting~
And to answer your question, Your flow of the story was very good. Your story is moving at a very good pace, it's not too slow nor too fast, which is good^^ Keep it up~

Total: 100/100

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