Monochrome Miracle By: coffee_ . Title 5/5: I liked the title, and it suitec your story well.


Poster 3/5: Honestly, i found that your poster wasn't very 'attractive' as in, i didn't find it very interesting. Plus i found it wasn't very good quality~ 


Description & Foreword 10/10: I like your description! It was short, but well written.
Layout 5/5: Your story is very organized and neat~


Characterization 15/15: You are very deatailed with your characters, the way they spoke and felt, was well detailed.


Plot 27/30: You have a very good idea and it's turning out good. one thing i found was that you inserted characters speaking but, put brackets around it. I would change that and just use italics, since if you do brackets people would think that you, the author is trying to say something in the middle of the story about something they wrote, which is not very attractive either.


Grammar and vocabulary 15/20: You had no grammar mistakes from what i read. But i did find that you were either forgetting to put words in, like, example: "This was, surprise, surprise, another boring day of darkness." that should really be "This was a surprise, surprise, another boring day of darkness" But then again, i didn't quiet understand why you put 2 "Surprise". There are two things in here that you should fix, and that's pretty much it. Just answering your question^^

Personal Enjoyment 10/10: So far, i am