Unspoken Words

by kjdzyx

angst/(highschoolau)

There are all kinds of dreams. The worst kind? The kind that is sweet and lovely but leaves you empty and sorrowful once you wake up. The exact kind that Baekhyun is stuck in.

Title: 10/10

Story Description: 10/10

The description and title are both short and simple, yet it held a lot of substance.

Vocabulary: 20/20

I really like your writing style. It’s descriptive and it had a nice balance between dialogue and text. Everything you write was symbolic where you had to read between the lines to understand the feeling of the story. In a way, it was poetic.

Grammar: 20/20

I didn’t find any mistakes that impacted the story.

Story plot: 25/25

I never expected that Baekhyun’s dream would be his reality. In the beginning, I thought that this story would have a cliché ending where Baekhyun would confess and they would live happily ever after. But you proved me wrong and by adding twist at the end. Funny how his personality, one that Baekhyun thought would lead him towards a safer life and one that he didn't force to change, would lead to an opposite outcome in times of need. 

Characterization: 5/5

I liked how you showed Baekhyun’s timid and reserved personality clearly but also the growth inside of him. However like in most real world situations, growth isn’t easy and people tend to crawl back to their old self. 

Creativity: 4/5

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

Overall Grade: A+