Baby [M]

by babyzchen

romance, Mpreg

He wants a child, but he didn’t want a lover. He needs to find a perfect guy that
can gives him a healthy child.
Then he met Kim Jongin, a suitable man that can give him a baby he dreams for.

Title: 4/10

This is the most vague title I have ever seen.  Based on the title alone, I don't know what this story is about. Even though it does fit the story line, you should change the title to a more descriptive and unique title. 

Story Description: 9/10

It was a nice description. Simple and short, but gave enough information for the reader. 

Graphics: 5/5

Grammar / Vocabulary: 17/20

The grammar was okay. There were a few minor mistakes here and there, but they could be fixed if you just slowly reread the chapter again. I would like to see more descriptive vocabulary. Maybe provided an image of Jongin or their scene on the bed more. 

Story plot: 15/25

Was this supposed to be a ual story or a story with an actual plot? Yes I understand that Kyungsoo wants to have a baby but how will Jongin provide him a baby? Perhaps I don't understand yet because there was only one chapter provided for this fanfic so far but you should explain the situation more. 

Characterization: 10/10

As far as i could see, every character was explained thoroughly. 

Creativity: 7/10

I don't know the story will play out but I do see potential for the story to strive. 

Overall Enjoyment: 6/10

Overall Grade: C