Written in the Wind of Whimsy

Description

 I thought of joining Write Like the Wind,  a writing challenge by MusicChibi. 

 

Mainly, it will be Kim Jaejoong, and then he's with Kim Junsu and Park Yoochun, and he's with other Kpop artists. 

I hope, you'd read it and enjoy. Thank you.

 

Please be adviced that  these are just fiction from my imagination, not meant for anyone in particular. And the character/s used did not have anything to do with the stories. 

I don't own the pictures, the pictures are from the Photobucket, owned by their perspective owners. Thank you, to the people who posted them.

Foreword

I'm going to start/continue  writing again, the stories will no longer follow the condition of the minimum and maximum words used but I will still use the prompts in Write Like the Wind by MusicChibi. 

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Buffalohighschool18 #1
Chapter 3: I miss them all
dream_keeper88 #2
Chapter 24: Aya! This plot could be expanded into a trilogy! ^-^ This could serve as the outline. Nyahaha! I'll beta for you, if you decide to work on this :3
dream_keeper88 #3
Chapter 20: I like that you were consistent with the mood/tone. It's melancholic. Even her thinking what to eat had a wistful note to it. I actually liked that part between them the most.

Just a few things to re-consider. The first line is a set of phrases and it didn't go well with the rest of the sentences. Perhaps you can do without that line and keep us guessing what's going on than dropping the bomb of leaving the military from the beginning. Try reading it without it and the flow is much better plus his thoughts alone give us a hint on what is going on. Why wouldn't a South Korean male artist not be able to stage right? I am not comfortable writing in present tense, although I have fics using this tense but I can say it worked here. You forgot "full" next to "chock". Chock alone gives a different meaning. And "long blink" was repeated more than twice within a few words in between but I have no synonyms for it.

Keep writing :D
SoshiSaranghae #4
Chapter 20: That...That was so touching. *wipes tear*
kpopartory #5
Thanks for the advice, I do appreciate it.
kpopartory #6
lolol
found my own story in the random story
May 8, 2012
kpopartory #7
Thank you, for the comment.
I've been thinking about it, and don't know how I'd approach it.
So, I will have to leave it as is for the meantime.
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