Never

Written in the Wind of Whimsy

Prompt 11: Never (max 850 words)
Kim Jaejoong, Jung U-know Yunho, Shim Max Changmin
354 words


In a bar, two guys were seated inconspicuously in a corner table drinking some beers.

Holding his beer and looking at his friend, Changmin asked with a frown, “Do you think he will come?”

After taking a swig from his beer, Yunho answered, “He promised, so he’ll come.”

“That guy is never on time.”

“hahahahah When did that guy ever came on time.”

“Never, we are always the ones waiting for him.”

“What do you expect, he has been like that ever since elementary school.”

You mean, kindergarten, right? hahahahah”

“hahahahah Yeah, I guess you are right.”

“What could he possibly give as an excuse this time, I wonder.”

“Traffic. hahahahah”

“hahahah So true, ‘traffic’ his unchanging excuse as always.”

“Whatever he does, we can’t hate the guy, and we’re forever will be waiting for him.”

“Yeah, we could never hate the guy, and again, I will have to agree, we’d just have to forever wait for him.”

A guy just came in with his eyes looking around, smiled when he saw them, and approached them.

“Hello guys,” two heads turned when they heard his voice. Jaejoong spoke sheepishly, “ I am sorry, I am late. The traffic was so bad.”

Changmin and Yunho smiled at one another before greeting Jaejoong. Yunho spoke with a smile, “You finally showed up.” He stood-up and shook hands with him,  bump arms and with their other arms giving a hug to one another.

Afterwards, Jaejoong turning to Changmin, who was also smiling spoke, “You took your time.”  He stood-up too and shook hands with him, bump arms and with their other arms giving a hug to one another.  “Come and sit down, and have a beer.”

Pulling a seat, still smiling, “Thanks.”

The other two sat back down, too.

Yunho asked, “Have you eaten?”

Changmin chimed in, “I’m hungry, we’ve been waiting for you for ages.”

Jaejoong answered, “Let’s order some food. I am hungry, too.”

 

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Buffalohighschool18 #1
Chapter 3: I miss them all
dream_keeper88
#2
Chapter 24: Aya! This plot could be expanded into a trilogy! ^-^ This could serve as the outline. Nyahaha! I'll beta for you, if you decide to work on this :3
dream_keeper88
#3
Chapter 20: I like that you were consistent with the mood/tone. It's melancholic. Even her thinking what to eat had a wistful note to it. I actually liked that part between them the most.

Just a few things to re-consider. The first line is a set of phrases and it didn't go well with the rest of the sentences. Perhaps you can do without that line and keep us guessing what's going on than dropping the bomb of leaving the military from the beginning. Try reading it without it and the flow is much better plus his thoughts alone give us a hint on what is going on. Why wouldn't a South Korean male artist not be able to stage right? I am not comfortable writing in present tense, although I have fics using this tense but I can say it worked here. You forgot "full" next to "chock". Chock alone gives a different meaning. And "long blink" was repeated more than twice within a few words in between but I have no synonyms for it.

Keep writing :D
SoshiSaranghae
#4
Chapter 20: That...That was so touching. *wipes tear*
kpopartory
#5
Thanks for the advice, I do appreciate it.
kpopartory
#6
lolol
found my own story in the random story
May 8, 2012
kpopartory
#7
Thank you, for the comment.
I've been thinking about it, and don't know how I'd approach it.
So, I will have to leave it as is for the meantime.