I'm his EX-WIFE
Description
This is a story of a fangirl who fell in love with her bias and will do anything to get married to her bias! Her plan was to get a marriage contract then make Kai sign it in a fansigning event. After Kai found out what his fan did, he immediately issued a divorce. The fangirl was sent to America to continue her study in medicine. When she finally graduated, she return to Korea. What will happen to her life now?
Starring Kwon Yuri and EXO's Kai.
Foreword
In my eyes you are my everything.. But in your eyes, I'm just part of a crowd.. I will do anything for you to be mine..
- Kwon Yuri
IRST IMPRESSION
How effective was the title?
The title is definielty VERY surprising and a bit of a throw-off since I expected something else to happen. But it definitely intrigues me.
Poster and BG layout? (Only if you have one. If you don't have one, you will not be assessed on it)
The poster is OK and not SUPER attractive, but I think it fits well for this genre.
Foreword and description: Did it draw me into wanting to read more?
It confused me and I didn't understand what it was about at first, but once I reread it, I understood.
STORY
How was the plot laid out?
The plot was not that interesting until Kai and Yuri got closer and Tao was jealous of them. I also liked the fact that Yoona began to like the nerd. It added to the fic a bit.
How was the pacing of the story? Was it draggy or was it rushed through?
The pacing did not match the plot as well. It was a bit rushed, but that's alright if you want your fic to end a bit quicker. It just seemed TOO quick, but others may like this pace.
Was the characterization consistent?
The chracterization was definitely consistent and the growth of each character was very impressive. I liked how Yuri grew up a bit after going to America. It was very interesting to see Kai stay the consistent flirty bastard he was. (Hahaha).
Was the story flow fluent? Was it choppy or was it smooth?
The story flow was definitely a bit choppy and smooth in some areas, but it wasn't a boring read.
How did you organize your events? Was it in order or was it all over the place?
The events were organized in a fine matter, but they went a bit too quickly.
How effective was the ending of each chapter? Did it leave me wanting to read more?
The ending of each chapter was interesting because they kept me guessing/
MECHANICS
Grammar and Spelling?
For the most part there were many errrors, but it didn't take away from the romantic and comedic part of the story, just be sure to be a bit more mindful: (I'll list one.)
1. "...Yuri decided to wear comfy clothes then she sleeped."
The sentence is incorrect because it is "Yuri decided to wear comfy clothes, then she fell asleep." Or. "Yuri decided to wear comfy clothes to go to sleep." Or, "Yuri decided to wear comfy clothes and she fell asleep right after." "SLEEPED" is not a word.
Use of Transition Words? (It helps with the flow from paragraph to paragraph so it doesn't seem choppy)
Totally fine.
How did I like it overall? Further Comments?
I laughed while reading it. It seemed a bit far-fetched for all this to happen, but hey you never know! It was interesting! Nice job!
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