☆ Book I: Behind the Hidden Pages ☆
by: ParkYong-Kyo

//TITLE: (3/5)

I do feel your title is fitting to your plot, as I interpreted that “behind the hidden pages,” you meant that behind what the idols are feeling, am I right? However, I don’t think this is as eye-catchy as it can be, plus I'm not sure what that "Book I" meant.

//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (4/5)

Basically I think that your description could attract a lot of readers in AFF because they are curious as to what idols really feel offstage.  However, the character descriptions caught me off-guard, as I’m usually the type to find out their characteristics on my own.

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (3/5)

I have a little bit of a hanging feeling on the poster you used here. The style you used for your titles aren’t that pleasing to me. The body seems to be fine with me, though.

//PLOT: (16/20)

Not bad, though. There weren’t just any huge conflicts in the current chapters.

//ORIGINALITY: (16/20)

Basically it’s about idols offstage, so I have to say this is really common in fics. What pulled this up, though, was that the 4(?) of the idols here apparently have family backgrounds affecting them. Usually affecting them was their lovelife, heh.

//FLOW: (11/15)

idk but I feel like this is just going a wee bit fast  between events.

//CHARACTERS: (11/15)

I’m a bit bored by your characters. Probably add a bit more feeling in them.

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (14/15)

It’s just minimal, yet unnoticeable.

//OTHER REMARKS:

Hmm I guess that’s all.

//t o t a l: (78/100)
thanks for requesting. n_n