//TITLE: (2/5)

Spacing in between letters really isn’t that much necessary. Isis also seems too vague, plus it’s common to find fics with this title already. It fits your story, at least.

//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (2/5)

From this I immediately thought that your fic is like one of those cliché good vs. evil stories already. This didn’t really put off much of a spark to me, either. Character description wasn’t necessary either. Readers would have to find out themselves on the roles of each character. You did mention “*More in-depth character descriptions will be revealed throughout the story”

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (3/5)

I’m impressed at your writing style. However… I have to be frank…your poster kind of ticked me off.

//PLOT: (19/20)

Okay I admit this is just intriguing.

//ORIGINALITY: (18/20)

I could say that you made it quite original.

//FLOW: (13/15)

I got quite confused at the shift between Isis and Earth, but at least you placed an author’s note in Chapter 4 to explain this. Setting that aside, I’m okay with your flow.

//CHARACTERS: (13/15)

I can imagine what your characters are doing, and I could identify their distinct roles. But I couldn’t quite follow how you introduced “The Hunter”. The You/Bom thing was quite confusing as well.

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (15/15)

There’s only one I’d like to point out:

“On the far edges of the universe,” You probably meant “far edge” here. What I understood from far edges was that maybe at both the left and the right edges, they have an Isis. Isis is just one planet, after all.

This could be negligible to others, I guess, so I just let this pass.

//OTHER REMARKS:

I’m not really into fantasies but… wow?

//t o t a l: (85/100)
I’m sorry this took me long to post, but thanks for requesting n_n