✽ { My Peter Pan } by autumnfaith
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☆ My Peter Pan ☆
by: autumnfaith
//TITLE: (2/5)
A K-Pop band’s song titles are really prone to becoming fic titles. I won’t say this is unique, since a lot have already used “Peter Pan”.
//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (4/5)
The way you described it made me think that your story’s really gonna be cute or smthn like that (until i saw "sad" in your tags sobs).
//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (3/5)
Your appearance is fitting, tbh, but about your flashback, I don’t think you should italicize that much. The story, so far, is mostly about the flashback, anyways.
//PLOT: (19/20)
It’s cute, tbh! Really cute. I don't see much of a really sad event yet, though.
//ORIGINALITY: (17/20)
It’s basically that typical “hey let’s be friends” “oh okay how about best of friends” “wanna take it to the next level?” “omg what if I confessed will we still be friends and won’t be much affected by it?” “omg FRIENDZONED” idea so I dropped down some points because in AFF, there are already tons of fics about those. What made this original, I guess, was that you added the idea that the girl was being bullied.
//FLOW: (14/15)
I could cope up with it just well, though.
//CHARACTERS: (13/15)
There’s nothing unique about Luhan or the girl’s role in here (part of originality). However since it’s in the POV of the girl, you described how she’s feeling pretty well.
//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (15/15)
None, really. ^^;;
//OTHER REMARKS:
I kinda expected this to be much of a fluff fic since the title has “peter pan” in it lol.
//t o t a l: (87/100)
yet again I’m sorry for the late review ;o;
thanks for requesting!!
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