✽ { The Day We Became One } by VixxTN

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 The Day We Became One
by: VixxTN

 

//TITLE: (3/5)

It doesn’t give much of a spark to me. Although it does fit your story

 

//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (3/5)

I had to read it again and again to fully understand what that is about.

 

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (1/5)

I’m not really amused at how this looks like. It seems really untidy. There were really a lot of times where I got cross-eyed. Plus avoid doing this format: (character): “(what he’s gonna say)”

 

//PLOT: (19/20)

Hmm I like your plot, though. It’s definitely a MAMA AU.

 

//ORIGINALITY: (19/20)

tbh it’s my  first time reading a fic with a MAMA AU (I’m not usually into those super power AUs) so I guess it’s fine with me.

 

//FLOW: (9/15)

Oh dear I really find this going all too fast. Take your time in describing each event.

 

//CHARACTERS: (10/15)

Erm okay about the 1st and 6th chapters I really really think that was unnecessary. Let the readers find out who they are. Also, I’m really that type of reader who wants to be particular about their feelings.

 

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (9/15)

Oh dear there’s really too much errors.  I really think you should have used something like MSWord to check on your grammar and spelling. I already took in consideration that your first language isn’t English.

 

//OTHER REMARKS:

sobs I’m sorry T_T

 

//t o t a l: (73/100)
sorry this took late, though.
don’t worry, there’s still room for improvement ;o;

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BR_exo
#1
Wow your 20 years old this year, time flies. I hope you comeback. Seems like you left after Kris news :(
Nictaeny9
#2
Chapter 27: Erm what about my review?
chensing #3
Chapter 26: thanks for the review! ill fix those things ^_^
LISHlian
#4
Chapter 25: Hi! Thanks so much for the review! I will try to improve on all the things which you've mentioned, and work on the things which I'm lacking of. Thanks for your honest review! ^0^
Nictaeny9
#5
username: Nictaeny9

title: Dark Ties

link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/543164/dark-ties-dark-romance-snsd-taeny-taeyeon-tiffany-yuri

no. of chapters: 9 (on going)

theme: Dark, Drama, Romance

main characters: Tiffany and Taeyeon

is english your first language? : yes

password: 900326
chensing #6
username: chensing
title: monster in the corner
link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/562201/monster-in-the-corner-exo
no. of chapters: 1 (on going)
theme: angst, mystery.
main characters: kris x oc
is english your first language? yeah.
password: 900326

there's only one chapter so far :/ I hope it's still reviewable though? :)
LISHlian
#7
username: LISHlian
title: ☬Nemesis of the Sky Descendants☬
link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/388020/nemesis-of-the-sky-descendants-fantasy-krystal-romance-supernatural-exo-kai-kaistal
no. of chapters: Currently 3 (including prologue)
theme: romance, fantasy, angst, supernatural, drama.
main characters: Krystal, kai, exo.
is english your first language? Yes
password: 300326

Thanks. The story is nowhere near complete. It barely even started! But still, I figured that I needed a review to see how I was going so far. THANKS AGAIN! \^0^/
writerinprogress94
#8
username: writerinprogress94
title: "I S I S"
link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/306119
no. of chapters: 10 (well, 12 if you count the 2 most recent, but they're just author's notes, so you can ignore ch 11 & ch 12)
theme: supernatural/sci-fi/fantasy
main characters: "You" as Choi Eun-Su; BoA; TVXQ; SHINee; EXO; Infinite; Big Bang; 2NE1; many other kpop idols will end up with larger parts later in the story (I'm planning this out as a trilogy ^^)
is english your first language?: Yes ^^
password: 900326

I haven't completed it yet (not on here, anyway), because I've been thinking that it might need re-writing, which is why I'm hoping for an unbiased, in depth review ^^
pinkblink
#9
Chapter 23: Thanks for reviewing and subbing! :3 Will credit you in my foreword soon :)