✽ { The Day We Became One } by VixxTN
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☆ The Day We Became One ☆
by: VixxTN
//TITLE: (3/5)
It doesn’t give much of a spark to me. Although it does fit your story
//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (3/5)
I had to read it again and again to fully understand what that is about.
//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (1/5)
I’m not really amused at how this looks like. It seems really untidy. There were really a lot of times where I got cross-eyed. Plus avoid doing this format: (character): “(what he’s gonna say)”
//PLOT: (19/20)
Hmm I like your plot, though. It’s definitely a MAMA AU.
//ORIGINALITY: (19/20)
tbh it’s my first time reading a fic with a MAMA AU (I’m not usually into those super power AUs) so I guess it’s fine with me.
//FLOW: (9/15)
Oh dear I really find this going all too fast. Take your time in describing each event.
//CHARACTERS: (10/15)
Erm okay about the 1st and 6th chapters I really really think that was unnecessary. Let the readers find out who they are. Also, I’m really that type of reader who wants to be particular about their feelings.
//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (9/15)
Oh dear there’s really too much errors. I really think you should have used something like MSWord to check on your grammar and spelling. I already took in consideration that your first language isn’t English.
//OTHER REMARKS:
sobs I’m sorry T_T
//t o t a l: (73/100)
sorry this took late, though.
don’t worry, there’s still room for improvement ;o;
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