☆ Chasing Pavements ☆
by: pinkblink

//TITLE: (4/5)

It’s a nice title, really. I can’t judge how this is going to fit with your fic, yet.

 //DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (4/5)

Your description is just one sentence and simple but it gives off that intriguing vibe, you know. Your foreword was also intriguing. I usually am not into dialogues in forewords but apparently I take in the whole detail here.

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (5/5)

Your writing style is perfect, and I do love the way you describe Seoul and those parts where the girl had to smoke. The appearance of this is fine with me.

//PLOT: (20/20)

Okay there’s only one chapter so far but this is absolutely amazing and I’m really looking forward to your upcoming chapters ;o; (you gained a new subbie my dear!). Oh lord the tension between the girl and Sehun...

//ORIGINALITY: (20/20)

I’ve really never seen anything like this before. Especially about the girl smoking. Well sure there are a couple of fics about unwanted pregnancy but you made this seem real unique from the rest.

//FLOW: (14/15)

I could go along with it just fine.

//CHARACTERS: (14/15)

I like the personality of the girl. Usually the female OCs of other fics are that perfect that they’re rare to find irl.  Then you have this girl in your fic, smoking. I can already identify the roles of the other characters involved as well.

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (14/15)

There’s only one thing I’d like to point out.

“Her mother and brother…” – “Her mother and her brother…” because without that “her” before brother, some would assume that her mother and brother is just one person (which is… really weird lol)

//OTHER REMARKS:

Okay I thought this would be SeKai (because that’s one of my dear OTPs lol) but okay haha you did a great job n_n

//t o t a l: (95/100)
thanks for requesting! I would definitely recommend this :3