☆ Adonis ☆
by: SapphireBlueSujuElf

//TITLE: (5/5)

I find the title unique and it fits your story.

//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (3/5)

Avoid placing character descriptions. My own opinion though, but I think that readers should imagine what the character should be like in your story. Your description though, it’s fine with me and I feel like readers would be attracted to your story because of that.

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (2/5)

I’m ok with the font and all but you should really place spaces after the periods and commas. About your poster, I feel like the characters should be emphasized more.

//PLOT: (20/20)

The first thing that came to my mind about this was Ouran Highschool Host Club. Because of that, you pass (lol omg excuse me but yeah seriously ;u; you gained a subbie!!)

//ORIGINALITY: (17/20)

But yeah, since this reminded me of Ouran, there also seems to be a lot more fics that are based from Ouran (especially Luhan being Honey and the Jo Twins being the Hitachiin twins).

//FLOW: (13/15)

Hmm there is this part where Kyuhyun says “You are… Oh Sehun?”, and from there, I interpreted that Kyuhyun knew him from before. idk where Kyuhyun got to know him (unless Kyuhyun read Sehun’s nametag).

//CHARACTERS: (13/15)

Kyuhyun does give out a wee little bit of emotions, so I’m fine with that.

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (14/15)

The mistakes you got were minimal, but barely unnoticeable. n_n

//OTHER REMARKS:

Sehun and Kyuhyun? Well that is interesting lol :3

//t o t a l: (87/100)
wow!! great job n_n thanks for requesting again :3