☆ With ☆
by: cupiecake

//TITLE: (3/5)

I find it weird to have just a preposition as a title. You could probably added something like “With You” or “With that Girl” or yeah.

//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (2/5)

On my opinion it’s a bit boring and it sounds so cliché. It’s not the kind that I’d find to be intriguing to move on to the fic.

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (4/5)

The appearance of this would give off a fluff feeling. Your writing style is fine, as well.

//PLOT: (18/20)

It's fine witg  me. It gives off that fluff and romance feel alright.

//ORIGINALITY: (14/20)

Okay it’s your typical love story, with the usual personalities and yeah. There’s nothing so far that makes it so unique from the other romance stories.

//FLOW: (13/15)

It’s only Chapter 2 wherein I felt it’s rushed. The rest are alright.

//CHARACTERS: (12/15)

I really am the person who’s more into the feelings rather than conversations or actions. I only found small parts where feelings were really emphasized. Readers would want to be moved by the feelings of the characters. Also, the personalities of your characters are common in such romance/fluff fic.

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (14/15)

I found no mistakes on your spelling. There's a few mistakes on your grammar, though.

“They told him to go away, but Kai didn’t want.” – “… Kai didn’t want to.”

“With confidence and brave…” – “With confidence and bravery…”

//OTHER REMARKS:

I think KaiZy would be cute lol. One of my friend’s fics introduced me to such pairing.

//t o t a l: (80/100)
ok i kinda posted this late omg sorry but here you go~
thanks for requesting!!