☆ Once a Fan, Now an Idol ☆
by: myunghyun4ever

//TITLE: (2/5)

Your title doesn’t give much of an impact and it pretty much gave away the idea of what’s going to happen in your fic.

//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (3/5)

My first impression on the description was that it was cliché, but who knows, maybe you’ve added some twist in it. Avoid describing your characters in the description/foreword.

//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (3/5)

The poster looks really cute for me and that quote in there is pretty relevant. However I do scrunch my face every time I see Korean words in a fic, because I don’t know the meaning of some words and probably the other readers don’t know what those words mean, either. And to be quite honest, you use too much oppa.

//PLOT: (14/20)

I don’t find anything exciting on the first 15 chapters. :/ I don't have much to say, either.

//ORIGINALITY: (17/20)

The idea of the girl’s brother being protective is quite new to me. The thing that dropped the score was that on the first few chapters it pretty much describes how a typical K-Pop fan is like (being spazzy and all) and her characteristics didn't change that stereotype.

//FLOW: (11/15)

Wait wait wait the girl becoming an idol… well that escalated quickly. Or probably I don’t get that part T_T;;

//CHARACTERS: (10/15)

Like what I said, I found nothing unique about the characteristics of the girl you used here. I’m usually the person who wants to be in the shoes of the characters in a story. Apparently I don’t feel much with them. You put too many conversations. This is probably why I got confused on the transition from the girl being an ordinary fan and to being an idol.

//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (15/15)

I didn’t spot any grammar/spelling mistakes. Good job. ^^

//OTHER REMARKS:

sobs I’m so sorry ㅠㅠ your grammar did pull you up though~

//t o t a l: (75/100)
(still sobbing but) thanks for requesting!! n_n