Brain
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Story Link - Brain
Ti t l e 4 / 5
De s c r i p t i on & Fo r e w o r d 1 9 / 20
Ap p e a r a n c e 10 / 10
Pl o t 1 9 / 20
F l ow 9 / 10
Wr i t ing S t y le 13 / 15
S p e l l in g , G r a m m a r , P u n c t u a t i o n 1 9 / 20
O v e r a l l 9 3 / 1 0 0
“Brain” already hints at the plot. It makes readers curious. It’s a simple title & it doesn’t really give you a good enough idea of what its about.
Description&Foreword: 19/20
It was simple to read ; The main point of the story was included. You didn’t give out too much info, just the right amount readers needed
There wasn’t a foreword, but credits & links are always good. (:
Everything is actually easy to read. The poster was colorful and also matched the story perfectly .You can already tell its a Yulsic fluff.
Plot: 19/20
The plot is original. I like how realistic their situation was ; how their mothers didn’t approve of them. Jessica’s parents and the way & pace Yuri’s brain developed into the right age. At the final chapter, you left me wondering about Yulsic’s son, Leo. Is he adopted? Where did he come from?
In my opinion, it should’ve taken slightly longer for Yuri’s brain to develop.
The chapters were short and made the story feel a little rushed. I think you could’ve tried switching to Yuri and Jessica’s points of views so readers know what was on their minds when certain things happened.
Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation: 19/20
I saw a repeated spelling mistake; instead of “sync” , it should’ve been “sink”. Spelling errors were very rare. Maybe just one word every other chapter.
Review by ramyunnie
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