It's unoriginal since there are tons of fanfics with similar titles and also, it isn't attractive.

So this Thing Right Here...That's a Description and a Foreword...? You've Got to be Kidding Me!: ☠☠☠

The description was average, and I ain't really a fan of 'what happens' and 'what if's. As for your foreword, you should not use bullet points. Also, your Author's Note was really unsightly. Use a smaller font and a different colour. It brings the attention away from the fanfic itself.

I'm Ready To Stab Your Characters Now: ☠☠☠☠

You didn't develop your characters enough for me to 'feel' them. I couldn't relate to them and also they were pretty unrealistic.

Are You Sure You Know What You're Doing?: ☠☠☠☠

The plot was cliche and a little rushed, to be honest. Everything happened too quickly. All your chapters are extremely short. I doubt they even reach 100 words per chapter.

Better Stay In School and Listen to that English Prof: ☠☠☠

—“Can’t you see that I’m tired and stressed out? All this dancing and singing is draining me and then you expect me to come home in the best of moods?!”

—“What I expect is for you to be you being just as happy to see me as I am to see you. Especially after a long work day, it’s good to know you have someone to come home to.”

—You grab your purse and jacket and continue walking to the door.

—“I know you heard me?!”

The question mark was redundant, it made it sound as though Yixing was doubting himself. The sentence was supposed to come off strong, so I suggest that you delete the question mark.

—You hurry to find your phone to see who it is was calling.

'You hurry to find your phone to see who it is'. Who what is? Were you expecting to see someone?

—“Me neither,” you said under your breath with a sigh.

What do you mean by 'me either'? One more thing, how in the world do you speak UNDER your breath? You must be a superhuman to be able to do that.

—You begin to cry again, forgetting that you were still talking to BaekHyun.

I suggest you get a beta reader.

I Can See Why You Like Writing Better Than Arts: ☠☠☠☠

The poster is basically a picture of Lay and Baekhyun, which is weird since this is an OC x Baekhyun/ OC x Lay fic and not a Baekhyun x Lay fic. Do you get me?

*YAAAWNNNN* Meter: ☠☠☠☠

It lacked emotion, and it was cliche.

 
VERDICT: ☠☠☠☠/☠☠☠☠☠

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