Your Story is Called What?!: ☠
The title caught my eye. It made me interested to read. There’s something about it that made me remember it, and that’s a good sign. Not to mention that it matched the story flawlessly. The only thing I would say is try not to make it so… long. I think this is one of the longest titles I’ve seen yet.


So this Thing Right Here...That's a Description and a Foreword...? You've Got to be Kidding Me!: ☠☠☠
The foreword pretty much told the story. Ending after the quotes would have given me more of the “ooh I can’t wait to see what happens” feeling. The thoughts after the quoted section told the readers that Shi Hye would have to choose between love and her career, therefore telling the main conflict of the story.
Secondly, the graphic barely matches the story. If Shi Hye is a spy, I would expect to see her in or with some kind of spy gear or at least peeking around a tree.


I'm Ready To Stab Your Characters Now: ☠☠
Mrs. Park—
I like how during the story, Mrs. Park said, “You will see his player side soon.” That quote left me feeling as if I should keep reading to see Jonghyun’s player side. The fact that she’s giving hints as to what Jonghyun is truly like, not only is it leaving Shin Hye marveling, but me as a reader, too.
Kim Jonghyun—
The way his character is at the beginning is not at all how he is to be seen as later on. Now, he’s full of fluff and cuteness, but in the Foreword he is made out to be “A hard-core player that breaks girls' heart like nobody's business.” It does say that he can be romantic and sweet at times, but I expected that to be AT TIMES, such as after he’s realized his feelings for Shin Hye,not at the very beginning of the story.
Lee Shin Hye—
Shin Hye’s character is so far, good. The consistent of her attitude and her actions is very believable. She relentlessly reminds herself that she has a mission to fulfill and not to fall for her target, Jonghyun. Also, Shin Hye gives me a feeling as if I know her in real life. The way she’s decoying Jonghyun in is very convincing, seeing that things like such happen in real life.
HyunA—
Ooh if I wasn’t the reviewer, I would post a comment about her! I love the way you introduced her into the story. Her randomly hugging Jonghyun was clever. However, she could have been more affectionate with Jonghyun, being the queenka of the school.


Are You Sure You Know What You're Doing?: ☠☠
The introduction of the story in chapter one was worthy. Flashbacks are good ways to fill the readers in without boring them with long paragraphs. Your flashback was appropriately information filled. It not only told why she went hiatus, but who caused it. It was very well written.
The plot type of the story, however, seems rushed. The fact that they have known each other for less than a week, but are already developing feelings for one another isn’t that realistic. Understanding that this is a fictional story, it should be at leastapplicable.
The way you introduced each character was also a success, HyunA’s character especially. Conversely, once you described how she was acting towards Jonghyunand what she was wearing, I expected to then see Jonghyun’s player side then… Nothing.

Better Stay In School and Listen to your English professor: ☠☠☠☠
Is English your first language? For the most part, there were mainly minor grammar issues. Some of your sentences made no type of sense. They were soo close, but not quite there yet. I understood what you were trying to say, but you should still practice using different tenses and when to use “it’s” or “its.” Some of your verbs didn’t match the actions happening, *sigh* this is only the half of the faults I found:

Spelling Errors—
Chapter 3- I was about to make it through the stupid crowd when I was harshly pushed and knockedon top of a guy.
Chapter 3- “That’s the girl who got punched by Jonghyun Oppa earlier on;Serves her right!"
Chapter 3- “Throughout the entire boring lesson that Ilearned months ago…”
"I wanted to teach you but since you don't want me to, it’s okay."

Grammatical Errors—
INSTEAD OF: The mission requires her to make guys fall in love with her while she are not supposed in fall back.
TRY: The mission requires her to have guys fall in love with her,while she is not supposed in fall back.
Error: Lee Shin Hye is a spy at The Art of Secret Mission Academy a.k.a TAOSMA
Correction: Lee Shin Hye is a spy at The Art of Secret Missions Academy a.k.a TAOSMA
Chapter 7-"Me? Nah as if real I would be worried for you." … Wuh? It sounds like you’re trying to say something around, “…as if I’d be worried about you.”
Chapter 6- "We reach!" and "We reached." I don’t know what happened here. There are many ways to say that you’ve arrived somewhere. For instance, “We’re here,” “here we are,” “we have arrived,” “this is the place,” thelist is endless.
Chapter 3- “I thanked Uncle Choi and went out of the car…”here, you used the wrong verb. It should be “I thanked Uncle Choi and got out of the car…”
Chapter 2- “As if Mrs. Park can read my mind, she assured me.” This should be, “As if Mrs. Park could read my mind…”
Chapter 8-“Jonghyun and Shin Hye were both caught by surprised of this sudden appearance.”

One last thing, in Chapter 5 when you switched POV’s, this is what it looked like:
Oh I remember I can't. I have to go to TAOSMA to settle some stuff. Damn.
Jonghyun's POV
While walking back home together with the four of them, I kept thinking…
If someone wasn’t reading this closely and/or slowly, they would not have caught this change. It confused me and I was taking my time reading.
Try bolding or making “Jonghyun’s POV” a different color.


I Can See Why You Like Writing Better Than Arts: ☠☠☠
The foreword and description looks so… dreary. The only colors there are on the things that aren’t related to the story itself. The chosen font and colors are so flavorless, it makes the words look smaller and gives the illusion of more words, as it may or may not be. Seeing so many words made me not want to read the foreword, being that it may be the summarized version of the story.
The background picture is fairly relevant of the conspiracy, although, your female character could have been in the picture, being the main character as well as Jonghyun. Your poster has good detailing, but it doesn’t fit the story.Your poster makes Shin Hye looks as if she’s not a heartbreaking spy. It doesn’t have to make her look bad, but it does have to fit her character. This needs revising asap.

*YAAAWNNNN* Meter: ☠☠
So far, this is a good story. I was generallymarveling what would happen next. The fact that she encountered her target on the first day and befriended him so fast was thought-provoking. There were some low points, unnecessary happenings, and times where I wanted to stop reading but inclusively this is a decent story!

VERDICT: ☠☠☠/☠☠☠☠☠