Ripped: The Day Jinki Found A Chicken
☠I'll Rip Your Story to Bits.☠ Reviews && Fanfic Help [Closed]Your Story is Called What?!: ☠☠☠☠☠
Mark-offs: It revealed too much of the plot
Details: A title is very important, because it draws the reader in. A catchy title can reel the reader in to your story. Also, it has to relate to the plot. If it doesn't, the reader will be thrown off.
So this Thing Right Here...That's a Description and a Foreword...? You've Got to be Kidding Me!: ☠☠☠☠☠
Mark offs: The description and foreword were messy and a bit predictable.
Details: The description was predictable, and it revealed too much of the plot like your title. The foreword was a little bit messy and all over the place. I suggest you fix it up a little, and use only one color font.
I'm Ready To Stab Your Characters Now: ☠☠☠☠
Mark offs: Unoriginal character
Details: The character of Onew was predictable and slightly cheesy. We all joke about how he has the Onew Condition, and that he loves chicken, but your characterization on those two are a little overexaggerated. I suggest you tone it down.
Are You Sure You Know What You're Doing?: ☠☠☠☠
Mark offs: Cliche
Details: The storyline was cliche. Onew finds a chicken, loves the chicken and then names it. It was not that interesting, and we have seen this storyline dozens of times. I suggest you add more elements on the story, or you change the storyline a bit to make it interesting.
Better Stay In School and Listen to your English professor: ☠☠☠☠
Mark offs: Wrong spelling and grammar errors.
Details: It mostly consists of you using emoticons, not using the proper punctuation mark, wrong spelling, capitalization, use of adjectives and others. I suggest you proofread your chapters before posting them, or try to get a beta.
I Can See Why You Like Writing Better Than Arts: ☠☠☠
Mark offs: Too much use of colors.
*YAAAWNNNN* Meter: ☠☠☠
Mark offs: Because I don't enjoy reading Onchicken oneshots
Details: It is worth reading for those die-hard MVPs, and that's the only comment I have.
VERDICT: ☠☠☠☠/☠☠☠☠☠
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