Title: My Co-Workers are...Animals?!

Author: StarlightTango

Reviewed by: Royalblueblood

Title: (3/5)

At first glance, the title appears to be quite interesting as it did trigger my thoughts. However, there is a major problem. Double punctuation is not advisable in writing. I'd suggest you to use only one of them, either question mark or exclaimation mark. Another downside of the title is that it gives your plot away directly. And to be honest with you, such titles will only draw in a particular group of readers - those that are fond with genres of supernatural and comedy. Just to share with you, I always find that an ambiguous title would do the trick to attract more readers (and potential subscribers).

Description and Foreword: (8/10)

Your description was well-crafted. Unlike your title, the description did not give away your plot. I find it interesting because of the way you wrote it - short and sweet. The question at the end leaves your readers pondering over what will in fact happen to the main female lead. That's an effective hook! There were a few minor, careless mistakes in your tenses though. Since your description is the first impression your readers have of your writing and story, it's best to perfect it.

Suggestion: But one night when everything changes changed, how will would this immature girl handle it?

Suggestion: Park Jiyoung was your ... not so average not-so-average teenage girl. 

Suggestion: After countless of job failures, she resorted to her last hope. 

In terms of your foreword, the way you used a prologue to provide the background and settings for your story was good. I was especially impressed with your foreword because it was presented from Exo's view point (instead of the female lead) this time round. I'm not an avid reader of such genres (especially supernatural, comedy) but I'd certainly give this story a shot after reading the foreword and description. Like your description, there were a handful of careless mistakes (spelling, tenses). 

Suggestion: "Tao! Did Have you clean cleaned the stalls yet?" 

Suggestion: There's are twelve of us.

Originality of Plot: (-/20)

Honestly speaking, I wouldn't have requested for a review if I were you. Firstly, the story isn't developed at all since you've only introduced the main characters. This is only the beginning of the story. Secondly, the plot isn't revealed yet. First chapter was the meeting between Kris and Jiyoung, while second chapter was the introduction of all the members (or zoo-keepers), and the third chapter was about the rules. Only the third chapter was revealing a tiny bit of the plot (with the suspense).

If I'm not wrong, this story will be somewhat similar to Fruits Basket, because of the similarity in the use of the Chinese Zodiac. The plot will be dependent on your development and how you implement your own twists to the story. The love triangle (between the female lead, the cat, and the rat) was one of the highly-raved parts in Fruits Basket. I'm sure you'll focus on the romance between your characters as well so be as creative as you can!

If I were to actually review the plot from chapter 1-3, you'd receive a very, very low score like I've explained above. This is unfair to you because you've yet to even present the main plot, the core of your story. As a reviewer, I'd recommend you to request for another review when you've already developed the of the story or even better yet, after you've completed the story. 

Mechanics (Grammar, Vocabulary, Pu