Title: Too Late

Author: Onceuponaforever

Reviewer: Royalblueblood

Title: (3/5)

Just exactly like what you've told me - plain and common. For titles, I've always felt that ambiguous ones are beautiful because they give us room for imagination. And that's what writing is all about! You don't need something that's completely linked to the plot of your story. Just a subtle touch would do, that's why I suggested 'Almost There' to you. Perhaps, 'Reaching You' works too.     Description and Foreword: (8/10)   There are many writers on AFF with very lengthy and detailed description, and it turns many readers off. I especially like how you kept your allignment - neat and clean. Your description was very well-written; short yet impactful. It has that hook that draws people in. The only nitpick I've would be the repetition of the quote - 'lost time cannot be recalled' in the first line and the last line. Avoid repeating the same thing in a description because it makes your vocabulary seem rather limited.     Your foreword consists of a decent exerpt from the one-shot, providing a prolouge of your story. A very good introduction, and hook, something that prompts your readers to click next and read further. I wasn't an exception, too. And I understand your intention to emphasize on the subject in your last second line, but you don't have to capitalize the first letter of 'he'. Instead, you either bold or italize the word.      Originality of Plot: (10/20)   I've yet to come across a story like this, but that doesn't make it exactly original. One, the plot was too direct and simple. Everything was sort of predictable. No twists, no turning points, no impacts and just flat.  Minho let Taemin down, Taemin hated him and when he was finally ready to forgive him, Minho passed away and it was all too late, leaving Taemin with regrets. There wasn't any conflicts or in your story. Even in a short one-shot, you need to have a plan in mind. Ask yourself this, what is the focal point of your story?   I had no emotions when I read the story. You wrote how Minho waited for his son to visit him but there wasn't a prelude of it. I understood how he waited in vain but you've to add layers to his emotions from expectations to disappointment to grief and just nothing left of him. You need to portray to contrast in order to set up the impact. But you started with disappointment right away and as a reader, I couldn't grasp his emotions at all.       I like the way you present the past between Minho and Taemin as a bedtime story to his daughter, Sulli. It was indeed creative and ref