Title: Through Healing and Love

Author: ImaginaryInvasion

Reviewer: Kakurine039

Title: (3/5)

Definitely does not capture my attention. It’s kind of generic and bland in my opinion. Plus, it’s somewhat of a common title on AFF.     Description and Foreword: (5/10)   The description was alright. I got the gist of what the story was going to be about. It didn’t really grab my attention at first glance. Your foreword was much better, though. However, you had some mistakes in it.   Foreword – But this power was to strong to ignore, and you shook at the thought of the damage it could inflict to the innocent people around you.   Suggestion – The ‘to’ should be ‘too’. ‘Too’ means ‘as well’ or conveys the idea of ‘in excess’ whereas ‘to’ is a preposition or is used to show the infinitive form of a verb.   Foreword – The people who had flooded this street moments ago seem to be dispersing into different directions involuntarily, and you knew that it was due to the treat this persons powers emitted.   Suggestion – I wouldn’t say that ‘treat’ would be the right word for this situation. It didn’t really make sense at first. Something like ‘… and you knew that it was due to the effect this person’s powers emitted’ would be more fitting.   Foreword – The figure approaching was tall, (very much so compared to your petite frame) his muscular frame noticeable even through his slightly baggie black hoodie, the hood of which covered nearly all of his face, excluding his plush lips.   Suggestion – It should be ‘The figuring approaching was tall (very much so compares to your petite frame), his muscular frame…’ Parentheses come before punctuations.   Foreword – You blink furiously in surprise, he was heading straight towards you, with what looked like no intent to change course.   Suggestion – ‘You blink furiously in surprise; he was heading straight towards you, with what looked like no intent to change course.’ A period or a comma and a conjunction could go there as well. The first two clauses are independent. You cannot just use a comma. Either make them into two separate sentences or use a comma and a coordinating conjunction.   A space goes after a set of ellipses, which are only three dots. Not four.