Title: Unstoppable Delusions

Author: Akane_Angel

Reviewer: Royalblueblood

Title: (3/5)

The title relates to your story well, leaning towards the dark, psychological genres. And I like how you have an epilouge at the end to serve as a conclusion as to what has happened in the story. However, the title just doesn't catch my attention. Perhaps, it's the adjective that makes your title seem a little dull or mundane. 

Description and Foreword: (7/10)

Your description was nothing out of the ordinary; decent but boring. I felt that you revealed too much of your plot because that was bascially everything in your story, except for the ending. I'd have preferred it if you left only the last line of your description. It creates that hook and dark mystery in your story. A good description don't need to be long or detailed; it just has to be thought-provoking or at least intriguing.

As for your foreword, there is basically nothing about the plot or story. It was just your author's message and credits, which I'd actually advise you to put it in a smaller font. After all, it's the story that you want your readers to focus on. I think it's unwise for writers not to make full use of the foreword. The foreword is a section for writers to show their intended writing style or to share a prolouge with their readers. Even though this is an one-shot, I'd suggest you to have at least an inspirational quote or line that's related to your theme. 

Originality of Plot: (12/20)

Although it's not one of those typical AFF storylines where a nerd is taking revenge on a Kingka, I don't see that much originality in your plot, either. I don't read much of stories with such dark, angst genres, but it's still a love story with a love triangle. And the way the female lead taking revenge on the third party (Yoona) just isn't anything particularly unexpected.

Your plot is there, your characters are there and everything is just there, but nothing is actually making the impact at all. What I'm saying is that you need a focal point. Taking the length of your one-shot into consideration, you've to focus on the inner conflict of your characters if you want your story to stand out. 

Moving on, your plot lacks substance. To put it simply, it's not realistic. I appreciate that this is a twisted version of a fairytale, but it needs to at least make sense. Firstly, is Myungsoo even aware of her deep love for him? If he is, I'm certain he will be able to sense her danger or perhaps suspect her as the culprit. You've to address such potential loopholes if not your readers will get confused. Secondly, I understand that Aerin is