The Real Introduction Pt. 1

An American Girl

alright so i'm soooo sorry i haven't updated in a long time...one word - College -_-...it's all the energy outta me

so since i'm having writer's block i'm going to split this LOOOONG chapter into halves (as far as I can tell atm but if it gets any longer i might have to make it thirds :O)

once again, i'm soo sorry it's taken me this long to update..if any of you were wanting to hear more of this story ^^

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It took quite a long time for both Sungjong to make an edible meal – he was used to Woohyun and Hoya cooking – as well as the rest of the boys to wake from their slumber.  Myungsoo opened the door between his bedroom with Dongwoo and the living room; it startled him to see Helen.  She was sitting in between Hoya and Jungryul.  Hoya was playing with the layers of Helen’s dress; he liked watching the chiffon float back down after he’d lifted it in the air.  Helen was watching the television, intently staring at the news anchor.  “Three men were killed in an alleyway near the Hongdae markets.  Their possessions have led local police authorities to dig deeper into the recent gang activity taking place in this area.  Please look forward to more a more safe nightlife in Hongdae.”  Jungryul was talking quietly on the phone, not caring about the news report as he made plans with the company to give the boys more schedules. 

Myungsoo didn’t say anything but he took a seat on the couch, lying across it with his head near Hoya.  The two boys acknowledged each other silently with a slight nod of the head before Hoya returned to his activities.  Myungsoo tried to pay attention to the television but was bored with it quickly.  “Ya, Helen…how can you watch this stuff?” Myungsoo groaned as he stretched between Hoya and Helen for the remote, blocking Hoya from his actions.

She caught his wrist as he picked up the remote, surprising Myungsoo.  “Hold on.” Helen spoke assertively as she leaned in towards the TV. 

The TV was still discussing the lead story – the three dead in Hongdae.  They had reporters on location of the crime scene and were explaining the story in more detail.  Myungsoo turned his attention to the TV as well.  “What?” He asked but Helen didn’t respond; she was too focused on the crime scene.

Helen’s eyes were scanning the background behind the reporter – the area surrounded in yellow, police caution tape.  It was her training to be able hypothesizes many scenarios just upon the “look” of the scene.  The cameraman had zoomed in on the reporter’s face; this camera technique allowed Helen to see a better view of the scene.  It wasn’t hard for her to piece together Hyun’s bloody appearance last night, at dinner, with the homicide of three gang members.  It was a simple, mundane job for Madacorp to assign, and it was not unlike them to get involved in petty criminals.  Madacorp had no gray area on criminals – it was just yes, or no.  If this gang, in particular, had been causing trouble and Madacorp had noticed them on their radar it was only a matter of when Madacorp would take action – they liked to deal with all matters ASAP but occasionally small matters did get pushed to the back burner…or given to a dropped Elite, such as Hyun. However, work like this wasn’t considered demoralizing for any Madacorp officer – Elite or not; Helen wondered why Hyun hadn’t invited her along.

The blood smears on the concrete walls behind the reporter and the crime scene tape would’ve been invisible to an inexperienced eye; Helen saw it immediately and her heart raced with the thought of a fight.  She leaned forward on her knuckles, dropping her grip on Myungsoo, and clenched her jaw tight.  She was searching for more clues as to what happened in that alley.  “Hey…common…” Hoya reached up to her shoulder and gently pulled her back against the couch, trying to comfort her.  “You shouldn’t be watching this stuff.”

His words made Helen smirk.  “After everything you heard last night, you still think I shouldn’t even watch the news?”

“What happened?”  Myungsoo interrupted, curious.

“Ya, Hyung, can you go wake the others?” Sungjong was standing next to the TV propping a stack of plates against his hip.  Helen thanked him with her eyes letting him know she had a huge debt to repay him later.  Sungjong winked in reply.  Without saying anything else he returned to his work in the kitchen and began humming a random song.

Jungryul stood up to leave the room; plugging his left ear and holding the cell phone to the other he stepped outside the apartment.  Hoya watched the door click closed before he glanced at Helen; she was still deeply fascinated by the new report.  He could tell she was focused on it.  Hoya looked towards the kitchen and watched Sungjong busily pace about – sometimes Sungjong would stomp his foot or pull at his hair in frustration.  Hoya moved to stand up but Helen reached over and put a soft hand on his knee.  “Wait.” Her gaze was still fixed upon the TV but he could tell she was serious.  Hoya sat back down and watched her, waiting.

Eventually the anchor man returned, moving on to the next subject and Helen removed her hand from Hoya’s leg.  She was more comfortable around Hoya now and she looked at him kindly.  “I’ll tell you everything.”  At her words Hoya’s eyes went wide.  Is she being serious?  Hoya couldn’t speak.  “I’ll tell you everything…once I know what’s going on.”  Helen laughed, turning off the TV and standing on her feet.  Hoya stumbled to do the same as she walked into the kitchen – she knew what needed to be done immediately and she helped Sungjong without any complaints or questions.  Hoya joined in but stayed silent while the other two laughed and made small-talk. 

Myungsoo had gone back to bed when the three had finished cooking the large breakfast and Jungryul re-entered the apartment.  He sighed, closing his phone and then looked up to view the three “kids” working hard and rushing about the kitchen – Hoya was sliding an omelet onto a plate; Helen would take it once he was finished and set it on the table.  Sungjong was pouring milk and juices into cups and counting utensils.  Jungryul approached Helen as she set down a plate on the table; “About your room…” he started. 

Her eyes darted up to meet his.  It was the first time he wasn’t sure if they had the same idea.  “I can call and cancel it but…” Helen hoped Jungryul understood where she was going.

“Is there stuff in that room?” Jungryul emphasized his words trying to hint and ask if she had any material in the room that would link her to Madacorp.

“Aniyo.  Just clothes and toiletries.  Everything else…the other stuff is with me.”  She tapped her pocket which outlined a cell phone. 

“Arraso.  I’ll go pick up your stuff and check you out of the room.” Jungryul nodded and started to turn towards the door.

“Appa!” she raised her voice, alarmed.  “You can’t.”  Sungjong and Hoya pretended not to hear anything.  “Hyun already knows which room is mine.”  Hoya winced.  She wouldn’t even let us come up there. He balled his hands into fists and threw his spatula into the cluttered sink.  Helen didn’t notice, “I’ll get my stuff on my own.”  Helen looked at the set table.  “Will you be here when I get back?” Her voice whispered – slightly in fear and pleading.

“Of course.”  Jungryul patted her on her shoulder.  She nodded and walked passed him without saying anything to Hoya or Sungjong.

Jungryul watched her leave before looking at the boys.  “Hyung…?” Sungjong tilted his head at Jungryul.

“Ye?”

“Will she be ok?” Hoya finished for Sungjong.

Jungryul smiled.  These boys had only known Helen for a few days and yet they were as worried about her as he was himself.  It’s amazing how much power she has over us and she doesn’t even realize what she’s doing.

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kissme-minseok #1
great job!
LemonPop #2
I think it's great!!!! DragonSalt, you're doing awesome!!!
WhosThere13
#3
Also: I'm guessing that you made Hoya get moody because he was frustrated with her simple and not-completely-the-truth answers, right? Just from a writers and readers perspective, that scene may fit in a bit more if you had hinted at his annoyance building up in previous chapters, or at the beginning of this one, say how he was feeling choked or something because his manager was getting stressed and Helen wasn't saying anything and it was beginning to push him too far. It just seems a little out-of-place that you made him fairly mild mannered so far in the story, but sudden made him short tempered and quick to punching random inanimate objects in this chapter. <br />
Again, I'm trying to say this just on a writers level-sorry if I sound pushy-its just a suggestion. :)<br />
Thank you for updating~!<br />
Also: Sorry I meant Jungryul* in my other review for this chapter >>
WhosThere13
#4
Awwww Hoya, don't get violent-getting annoyed and punching walls is never a good response-plus it doesn't make people want to tell you their secrets anymore then before haha<br />
On another note: HOT DAMN HOYA, LOOK AT YOU GO HAHAHAHA XD I loved how Sungjong totally, completely, and unintentionally, ed Hoya. That was just golden. Plus that little 'making-references-to-their-makeout-and-then-giggling-to-themselves' scene with them and Sungjong and Junryul-maaaade me laugh XD It's nice, cus it shows that Helen didn't mind too much from the semi-forced kisses, and Hoya had managed to cool his temper a bit after the makeout. You also just eased the readers from a more serious and passionate scene to a funnier and lighter one without looking too cheesy or unrealistic (in the sense of the story), so good job~ <br />
To address your concern about the Chapter: This chapter didn't click all the way like the previous ones had, but overall it was pretty good-You don't need to change it-it was suppose to be about Helen informing Hoya about her background, and their little love thing going further, right? Then you did just that, as well as added a little bit of other pieces of the story here and there to act as a buffer so the story wouldn't go too off track. It was a little fast, but there's bound to be a couple of chapters in every story that seemed a little sped up, so don't worry. :)
DragonSalt24
#5
^^ i hope you look forward to finding out more about Hyun - hopefully the twist that's coming up will be an interesting surprise<br />
i'm not sure if the place where i found the information but i actally heard that Jungryul is the name of one of Infinite's managers - i wasn't sure if that's actually true but if it was i wanted to use it to make it more realistic^^<br />
i'm glad you actually noticed the different viewpoints! it's hard for me to explain everything without showing an outsider's opinion on a situation so i'm glad you like that and it doesn't bother you or give away too much information^^<br />
thank you again for the comments! i really enjoy your feedback and it's helping me stay on track with the story i wanted to write originally^^! i hope you still enjoy it after this next chapter
WhosThere13
#6
Hmmm I disliked Hyun before, but now I'm kinda wary of him...<br />
It's different to see that one character you created, Jungryul, is kinda acting as a narrator, but when I say different I mean in a good way. It kinda helps the readers since he views the love triangle from his point of view, unbiased, while with Hoya and Helen, its a bit biased since ones POV is emotional, while the other is more analyzing and on-guard with Hyun and a little unsure with Hoya. (Sorry if that sounded confusing haha)<br />
I also like how with Sungjong and Hyun's relationship, you made the former like the latter and be friendly with him, which I can see him doing in real life XD<br />
Anywhos~Thank you for updating, it was another very-well written chapter :)
DragonSalt24
#7
!!! ahh i'm so thankful!! your feedback makes me very happy!<br />
i hope i've made Hoya more realistic towards how he acts on interviews and on shows, etc.<br />
ha i really can't say thank you enough! <br />
if there's something that comes up in the future that you don't quite agree with or don't like in the story please let me know!^^ and ha, i really appreciate your comment! - it helps me know that i'm doing Something right with the story^^<br />
please enjoy!
WhosThere13
#8
Normally I have the bad habit of being a silent reader and not commenting on stories and subscribing and stuff, but I felt guilty when I realized no one had said anything in Chapter 19-and I had loved it!<br />
Hoya is so freakin' awesome in here, and I love your female lead (she's so badass!)I love your writing-It can be really hard to find someone with such good grammar and spelling here on AF, not to mention a female lead with an actual name rather then ~~~ or something, and one so likeable too.<br />
The interaction between them in Chappie 19 is perfect-I admit when I started reading that page, I was wondering if you were going to add a kiss scene-but the amount of skinship was just right-a kiss would have been too fast and would become awkward and a burden later on in the story :)It was perfect!<br />
I just finished reading Chapter 20-Gaaaaaaah I wanna know if Hoya starts a fight with Hyun (though he'd totally lose XD) It's so goooood!<br />
Thank you for updating! Sorry for not commenting sooner!
DragonSalt24
#9
thanks for the nice comments guys!!^^
LemonPop #10
DragonSalt, i'm just giving you a bad time ;) It's really great!