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Title: 10/10

It was kind of hard to grade the title, since it was based on the song. Well, I just gave you full points because it fits the story well.

Foreword: 15/15

Wow....just wow. One sentence was all it took to captivate me. Well done :D

Overall Look: 4/5

I would’ve preferred the background to show the full story title, instead of it cutting one or two letters off. Since I see that you requested a background from a shop and I feel like I'm being too judgemental (hmm...is that the right word? or picky....:P) right now, so I won’t take any points off for that. However, some paragraphs have larger font sizes than the others. Actually, I think it would be better if you made the whole thing bigger (the smaller one just seemed too small...).

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Grammar: 28/30

I can tell you know your grammar rules well (you sound like a native speaker? am I right?), but I found little gramatical errors, as well as those unrelated to grammar (but I had no where else to put it :P). For example:

“Pale hands that contrasted the dark glass.” ⇐ did you mean “Pale hands that contrasted with the dark glass.”

“I asked not releasing his hand.” ⇐ did you mean “I asked, not releasing his hand.”

“Before he could answer the entry door to the lab was smashed open.” ⇐ did you mean “Before he could answer, the entry door to the lab was smashed open.”

“I looked up at Yongguk;he looked down at me” ⇐ add a space! (I’m sorry, I had to mention this...it just bothered me....)

You might want to proof read one more time? You don’t have to, of course. I wouldn’t have noticed it if I wasn’t carefully reading your story word by word :P If you're a perfectionist (like me...sometimes) though, I would suggest doing so :D

Spelling: 20/20

Didn’t find any errors ^.^

​Flow: 13/15

They grow attached to each other awfully fast. Yongguk also becomes comfortable with her really fast too.  I found it weird how his first response was a one worded answer and his second response included information he wasn’t asked about (the part where he was saying how many times he ran away). I would expect him to be a little more quiet.

​Originality: 5/5

This is the first story I’ve read like this. Good job!

Total: 95/100

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Reviewed by: musicxdance

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